candyheartlia

thank you very much for the critique and I will try to do some boxes tommorow when I start lesson 2 :)

hello my name is Lia and this is your DAB critique! it will be divided in 3 sections

lines:

superimposed look mostly alright although I see a bit of fraying in one of the ends on the first page but on your second page it's actually a bit better and there isn't nearly much.

ghosted lines look steady and confident for the most part but I do notice you going over at least one line once or twice and that's just something one should avoid however since most are one solid line Its not too bad

ghosted planes have the same slight critic from above but otherwise they seem to be perfectly done, not much unsteadiness I can see or wobbling.

ellipses:

tables: there's barely any overlap in the ellipses and all of them seem pretty snug and tight with little empty space among them. very well done.

ellipses in plains: I think they look pretty good, steady lines and the Ellipses are well made and within boarders with pretty snug circles.

funnels: they are quite Good, the ellipses fit and are snugged against each other and fill up the entirety of the funnels and I can see where the minor axis divides the Ellipse.

Boxes:

The plotted perspective is quite good and all I could ask is for you to maybe hatch over the front face as if I remember correctly it's part of the exercise, but the exercise itself is more then complete to me!

as far as rough perspective you seem to have ran into the same problem as me! winch is making a lot of lines run towards the vanishing point when that's not the point of the exercise at all. however this is one the more difficult exercises of lesson 1 in my opinion and even I had to redo it my self. Good luck in your redo!

I must say that your Rotated perspective is very satisfying to look at! You managed to flip the fox around in every angle that was asked and were able to picture the box in a 3d plane. this is a tricky exercise so you should feel proud

At last your organic perspective is also quite Good! The lines were steady and you followed the perspective quite well and managed to execute the exercise well.

hello Ali, I'm Lia and I'm here to do your DAB critique of your very lesson! I'll be splitting the review in 3 sections if you don't mind.

lines:

superimposed: There quite nice and I must say that there very little to no fraying on the lines and that they are done in a steady and confident manner. I mark this part as completed.

ghosted lines: they are steady and confident with no real wobbling nor arching. very nice job, Ali.

ghosted planes: I can see that you have sketched over a line or two in this exercise and while it didn't spoil the exercise, I want to point out that it's something one should avoid doing for future notice.

ellipses:

tables: they are done very well, the lines are drawn over twice and they are snug with no spaces but also no overlapping with many places and gaps filled up. very good job!

ghosted ellipses/ planes: the ellipses are within their bounds, I can see you ghosted/ planned your lines accordingly and the lines are steady as they should. Good job.

funnels: the minor axis splits the middle Ellipse a bit better in some examples then others however the ellipses are snug and well made just as other exercises so I consider it a good job.

Boxes/ perspective:

plotted: You did everything pretty well, I can see where the boxes meet in the vanishing point and completed the exercise accordingly.

rough perspective: there's a bit more wobble in your lines then it's usual, but I think that you were able to complete the exercise well as all lines meet towards the horizon line rather then just towards the vanishing point if at all. Good job.

rotated perspective: you did probably the most difficult exercise in here very well! I can see the boxes clearly and I can see that you managed to be able to rotate them in all degrees to achieve the final globe shaped look and that you were able to follow a clear logic and didn't guess how to rotate the boxes.

organic perspective: i saw you going over a line or two in this exercise but the actual boxes themselves are actually pretty good especially compared to the rough perspective boxes and you have a very good grasp on organic perspective and how to draw the boxes alongside a line.

I notice that you have the ghosted ellipses but not the planes of the first part, so could you post that to get the review?

I think you are missing ghosted planes from the first part of the lesson! can you post It?

hello I'm lia and I'm here to do a critique of your homework!

let's start with the lines!

your superimposed lines are very Good! there steady and I see no fraying of the lines at all, pretty solid start right there :).

your ghosted lines are quite confident and I only see a tiny bit of unsteady lines / wobble and just a bit of arching; but otherwise it's very good.

your ghosted planes are also quite Good, they fill up the page and are drawn in many different angles and are clearly ghosted over and planned.

so overall I see nothing of note critiquing in your lines!

ellipses:

The table: I can see you jam packed your table of ellipses and while there isn't much overlap I do see that they skew away from each other just a tad and aren't as snug as they could be, but overall you managed to do the goal of the Ellipses so I count the exercise as executed.

The ghosted ellipses are also done quite well! I can't find much to complain about them or critique them so you got a good job going on there.

now onto the funnels: the axis is splitting the middle quite evenly and I only see two ellipses that aren't as snug as they could be next to the others but overall they are done quite well!

boxes:

plotted perspective: I can see that the boxes all go meet up in their respective vanishing points and isn't too crowded otherwise. very nice job!

rough perspective: I think your second page is much better then your first page in making the boxes meet alongside the horizon line and not towards the vanishing point, not to say your first page is wrong, it just i think it's better

rotated perspective: you rotated the boxes very well! You achieved a good globe like shape and were able to fully rotate the boxes at every angle, showing moderate understanding of the 3d plane.

now for the organic perspective I think you drew the boxes alongside the line pretty well and show also a good understanding of how the perspective is meant to be employed.

overall, good job!

hello you seem to be missing ghosted planes!

post them and I will review them and hopefully mark your submission complete. thank you!

hello I'm lia and I'm here to review your DAB submission! I'll be going through the pages in sections :). so let's start with the line section.

lines:

superimposed:

they seem to be steady and confident but I see some slight fraying in the end, winch is actually pretty common, thing for newbies, so no need to beat yourself for that, but make sure to keep your hand steady through out.

ghosted lines:

they seem pretty Good, no real wobbling I can see and they clearly are ghosted and come from different angles and positions. Good job!

ghosted planes:

your ghosted planes seem perfectly acceptable, I can see you set the dots to plan them through and I only see a slight wobble there and there bit otherwise, good job.

ellipses:

The tables are pretty Good! I see they are snug and I only see a slight bit of overlap of the ellipses there and there and one or two have a pretty clear gap, otherwise most are correct.

I don't see much wrong in the ghosted ellipses either, the lines are steady and the planes are at many different angles and the ellipses are drawn properly.

The funnels look pretty great, I can see a clear line ( minor axis) dividing the middle pretty nicely in two halves and the ellipses are drawn pretty snug without as much overlapping compared to the tables so I see a improvement there.

boxes:

your plotted perspective seems nice, I can see the boxes all coming towards two clear vanishing points, so you achieved the purpose well.

your rough perspective seems nice! The boxes all go towards the horizon rather then the vanishing point winch is a lot tougher then it looks ( I had to redo this exercise myself) but I do see a slight unsteady wobble there and one of the boxes has a somewhat arched angle, but other then that it's not too bad and I don't think it warrants a redo.

on your rotated perspective/ boxes I can see you did a largely great job rotating the boxes and using the boxes you did as a guide to where to rotate, even if on the left it doesn't rotate as perfectly as in the right. however I was told and experienced that this is one of the harsher exercises to do on this whole lesson and you just going through it is something! other then that you had a better time with it then myself.

your organic perspective is also Good, you seem to have a grasp how to draw and shift the boxes to follow along the line of sight and the boxes are drawn rather nice and steady.

I'll give you a completed!

hello, I wanted to point out that you seem to be missing the organic perspective in your Imgur submission and I wanted to ask you before I could do a full review of your submission!

Also I wanted to compliment you on your hand writting

hello, I'm Lia and I'm here to do your critic of your first lesson ( it's also my first real critic in this site so excuse me of my own noob behaviour!)

so let's start with your lines, I notice a bit of fraying at one of the ends in your very first page on your superimposed lines, but I can tell they are steady and confident and it fades away by page 2.

as far as your ghosted lines are concerned I can see that they are short and are done well with little wobbling and no arching!

your ghosted planes are varied in terms of angle and are done with steady lines so good job on that as well!

onto the ellipses:

your table of ellipses seems fine! there's little wobble and no overlap of the ellipses and they are snuggly pressed against each other, with little to no gaps.

I have similar feelings about the ellipses in planes, confident lines and the Ellipses are clearly drawn 2-3 times and are done in varied angles that fill up the page.

on the funnels the I can see 2 symmetrical halves on the middle and the ellipses are drawn close together to fill in the funnels, so you completed the goal of the Ellipses, so now onto the boxes.

The boxes:

I noticed you actually posted the photo of the rotated boxes twice, one having hatched shading, so I'm assuming you shaded it after taking one picture of it pre hatching, so I'm going to review that one:

It's rather clear you've rotated the boxes well and the faces are very well defined and you have a good grasp of how the boxes are meant to rotate in a 3D plane in order to achieve the " globe" finished result.

now onto plotted perspective: I can see you had a good grasp of the exercise, as the lines/ boxes weren't distorted and I can see a clear vanishing point that they are drawn towards. Good job!

on the rough perspective I can see that you tend to skew quite heavily towards the vanishing point towards your second page when there's no need for it. however your examples of your first page are a bit better, so I don't feel inclined to ask you to repeat it ( I too struggled with rough perspective and it's hard not to go towards it even if I see you can manage It!)

so now for the organic perspective, I see you ghosted your lines quite nicely and I like that you seem to have a very good grasp of perspective and I don't see anything too wrong with it ( boxes closer to us are bigger vs smaller ones) so you achieved the basics of the exercise!

so good job, I'll be marking your lesson as completed