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Do you think that I'm good to go to 250 cylinders challenge or is there anything I should do more pages of?

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I'm not too sure how I could use only a few petals for the sunflower drawing, so I appreciate if you could leave some tips about it.

Hi! Congrats on finishing Lesson 2! I'll be critiquing your work.

Thinking in 3D

I think that the lines of your organic arrows are drawn confidently, so I'll applaud you for that. I also see that you tried to make your arrows have these interesting twists and turns. However, I don't see any line weight on the overlapping points of your arrows. Make sure to add line weight on the overlapping lines to help signify which areas of the arrow are in front of the other. Here's an image to help in illustrating my point. I also recommend adding line weight to the front of the arrow to make it appear closer to the viewer, but it's fine if you don't want to. I also suggest that you make the parts of the arrow away from the viewer more compressed to help signify the 3D appearance of your arrows. In your organic forms with contour lines exercise, I think that you need to work on your organic forms more. I noticed that some of your organic forms have some form of pinching or elongated ends, but I believe that you can improve on it. I would also like to point out that some of your contour ellipses (and curves) have smaller degrees when they're supposed to have larger degrees, judging from where they're placed. Don't be afraid to make your ellipses have larger degrees if necessary. You may want to reread this section about degree shifts. Despite of that, your were able to shift the degrees of most of your contour lines properly, so that's a good thing. You also managed to fit in your contour lines on the forms properly and you also managed to align most of your center lines to the center of the form, so great job on that.

Texture and Detail

I think that you did a great job on the texture analyses exercise. I think that the transition from dense to sparse is done well. You also made use of shadow shapes instead of lines, so good job on that. I do notice that the shadows in the bottom-right rectangle isn't dark enough. You probably have ran out of ink or something similar to that, so it isn't really a major concern to me. Although I applauded you for not using shadow lines in the texture analyses section, I observed that you made use of shadow lines in the dissections exercise. It's fine if you're struggling with capturing these thin shadow shapes. This might help you to avoid making these shadow lines. I also think that you could emphasize the silhouette of some of your textures even more, especially on your cobblestone, fish scales, broken slab & bricks textures. Despite of that, your textures seem to follow the curvature of the form, so good job on that.

Construction

Just like on your texture analyses exercise, I think that you did a great job on your form intersections exercise. You made use of equilateral forms with shallow foreshortening and they all appear coherent. Your intersections may not be perfect, but they were good attempts nonetheless. I also noticed some areas of the shaded side of some forms aren't shaded (take a look at the intersection of the box and the sphere on the bottom-right section of your second page), probably because you were confused of all of these intersecting lines. I believe that you can get better at this exercise if you work on it during your warm-ups. As for your organic intersections exercise, I also think that you did a great job on this exercise. Your forms wrap around the form its sitting on and your cast shadows follow the curvature of the forms.

Overall, I think that you did a great job on this lesson. I believe that you are ready to tackle Lesson 3, but you might need to work on your organic forms and contour lines (and maybe organic arrows and form intersections) during your warm-ups. Remember to take your time and not grind the exercises. Good luck to you!

Hi! Congrats on finishing Lesson 1! Here's my critique on your work:

Lines

I think you did a good job on your superimposed lines exercise. Fraying is indeed noticeable on your superimposed lines, but it's nothing to worry about since it's only present on one end of the lines, not on both ends. Keep practicing on it, and I'm sure you'll be able to prevent fraying on both sides! One thing about your lines that I would like to point out is that some of your lines (both the ghosted lines & planes and boxes sections) are wobbly. It's either because you prioritize accuracy over confidence (which you shouldn't do - focus on confidence rather than accuracy) or you're not used to drawing from your shoulder yet. I advise you work on making those lines more confident during your warm-ups.

Ellipses

You did a great job of keeping most of your ellipses touch the 4 edges of your planes on your ellipses in planes exercise. For your table of ellipses exercise, I see that you tried to make your ellipses fit in the given space, which is a good thing. Your minor axes cut some of your ellipses into two symmetrical halves in your funnels exercise, which I also think is a good thing. I believe that you'll be able to make your minor axes cut all of your ellipses into two symmetrical halves as you progress through this course, so don't worry too much about it for now. I do want to mention my main concern regarding your ellipses: your ellipses aren't smooth. The wobbliness of some of your ellipses are noticeable. Although I commended you on making your ellipses touch the edges in the ellipses in planes and table of ellipses exercises, it seems that the confidence of your ellipses is sacrificed for it, or it's just that you haven't gotten used to drawing with your shoulder yet. Same with your lines, I advise you to work on making your ellipses smooth and confident.

Boxes

For your plotted perspective exercise, you did excellent in making your boxes fall between the two vanishing points. I would like to point out that some of your vertical lines aren't perpendicular to the horizon line, but it isn't really a major concern. You also did a good job on your rough perspective exercise. You managed to make your horizontal lines parallel to the horizon line. I have nothing much to say about your rotated boxes and organic perspective exercises, considering that these exercises are difficult. Overall, I think you did a good job on the boxes section!

Before I end my critique, I want to address a major concern regarding your work. I noticed that you didn't fully commit to some of your marks. I observed that there are lines in which you drew once or twice over the initial mark. There's also a case in which you ignore your "wrong marks" and drawing in the "correct marks" in hopes of making the form appear "correct". This ruins the illusion of 3D form. I advise that you fully commit to your marks, even if you think that mark was unintentional or a mistake. Since there's no way for you to erase your marks, drawing over them once or twice just to make them look "right" or trying to correct these "wrong marks" by drawing "correct ones" ruins the illusion of 3D form and makes your drawing appear unappealing (except if you're adding line weight, which requires you to draw over the mark). Fully commiting to your marks also forces you to face your mistakes head-on and get over with these mistakes, which is an essential part of learning.

In general, you did a pretty good job, aside from the fact that your lines & ellipses are wobbly and you didn't fully commit to your initial marks. I think you're ready to tackle the 250 boxes challenge, but please keep in mind my major criticisms about your work. Remember to take your time and avoid grinding the exercises. I wish you good luck on tackling the 250 boxes challenge and future lessons & challenges!

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I see that there are certain parts of my submission that I didn't do well enough, so do I need to redo some exercises? Or am I good to go to Lesson 3?

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Here are the 30 additional boxes you asked me to draw.