8:15 PM, Tuesday January 18th 2022
Hi I'll reviewing your homework
Arrows:
So for your organic arrows I can see your lines are being drawn with confidence which is a good thing I would however suggest you try to make the spaces in between your arrows much smaller in the back and larger in the front as it makes the arrow feel like it's going off into space more. You could also try adding line weight to the front of the arrow to further create the illusion that it's closer however this is optional.
Forms: As for your sausage forms I can notice some of your forms with ellipses aren't alined correctly with your minor axis they should be even on both sides just like the previous funnel exercises. Your ellipses do seem to be drawn with confidence however and the degree's of your ellipses get larger as they get further from the center which is correct I can also notice there's a few cases of your ellipses going out of bounds thus could be because your going too quickly or because your not ghosting your ellipses enough.
Textures: I can see that your drawing your textures using cast shadows instead of lines which is correct however I feel like you could have the transition from dense to very little texture be more gradual as I feel the texture in the middle could be a bit more dense. Your wooden planks on the bottom for example after the dense part ends its mostly the same level of texture until the end.
Dissections: I can notice some of your textures don't wrap around the forms your Pineapple and Raspberry for example remember to have much larger shadows and to have your forms bunched up and warped (for example if your pebbles are circular on the edges draw them as ellipses with the degrees getting smaller the closer to the edge they are) much more and have the center have much less texture.
I feel you could break the silhouette much more then you did remember that the silhouette is the most important part of the form to let the viewer know what kind of texture it is as it's the first thing our eye sees when we first look at something.
Form intersections: Your form intersections your forms all have consistent foreshortening and none of them are inconsistent from what I see. Some of your hatching lines aren't drawn with confidence which can hurt the illusion of form I can notice a few of them also go out of bounds which also hurts the illusion of form however these are few and far between. Your intersections themselves look quite well however I would recommend you add some thicker line weight to make it easier to see.
Organic intersections: You kept you forms simple which is good and you drew through your forms which is aso correct. As for the shadows I can see that some of your cast shadows aren't wrapping around the form there being cast on as much as they should be try to think of the form that the shadow is being cast on and how it would wrap around it.
I also feel like some of your forms in the back (mainly on the first page) could wrap around the back more as it feels like they're floating without any other forms to support them try to imagine your forms like water balloons and how that would pile on top of each other. I recommend rewatching/reading uncomfortable lesson on the oragnic forms as it clears up a lot of issues more people have with them.
I hope my critic could be of some help sorry if it was a bit long