Keednein

Well, there is much less fraying than before, which is good, but I may have told you wrong in the first place. Between when I gave your first critique and this one, I had my own work critiqued as well, and they recommended I work more on Ghosted Planes instead of Ghosted Lines to help my penmanship, and maybe I should've had you do the same.

I hope I didn't waste your time by making you re-do the Superimposed Lines. I'll go ahead and mark you as complete. You'll also have plenty of opportunities to practice with the 250 Box Challenge.

Thank you for your critique. Sorry it took me so long to reply back. Here is my re-do.

https://imgur.com/a/PshDCiw

I think my wobbly lines started when I got frustrated with the 250 Box Challenge, and I ended up learning a bad habit by trying to take more time with my lines. I should probably go back and re-visit a lot of the exercises when I can, including the Texture ones. I think I'll start doing the Ghosted Planes over the Ghosted Lines as well.

(P.S.: For the organic intersections, the only reason I didn't draw through my ellipses is because that's how it was on the example at the end of the webpage.)

You're welcome!

I think you did pretty good overall. Your lines are clean throughout, including your hatching. Your line orientation is off, especially with the inner corners, but that's to be expected. My main critique is that maybe you could have tried to have a bit more variety in your boxes. You could have tried having a few more with more extreme foreshortening, just for practice. Also, you maybe could have tried out different orientations of the cube (check out this Imgur: https://imgur.com/Kqg6uMX). But those are minor complaints. I think you're ready to head on to Lesson 2. Good job and good luck!

Lines: You have a lot of fraying on both ends of your Superimposed Lines. I think you need to go back and re-do both pages. and take the time to set your pen in the right spot each time. Everything else seems alright though, including your Ghosted Lines, which look incredibly smooth and confident for someone just starting out.

Ellipses: I think you went a bit overboard with your Table of Ellipses by filling in every last little crevice. I'm not sure drawing circles that small really helps any. Your other exercises look fine for now though.

Boxes: For your Plotted Perspective, I see you tried to keep it clean for the first row. Normally you should extend all the way to the VPs to check your perspective, but you did that for the other two rows so it's no big deal. Similarly for your Rough Perspective, you probably should've tried to extend the lines of the box you crossed out anyway, as hard as it is to try to accept your mistakes when you mess up that hard (trust me, I've been there). But again, no big deal. Your Rotated Boxes look a bit funny. If the box in the center is "Tier 1", then the transition in perspective from Tier 2 to Tier 3 is too extreme. I appreciate how there's a substantial improvement between the first and second page of your Organic Perspective.

I really like the second drawing, very flowing and stylized. Is that colored pencil?

Good job! You went above and beyond by re-doing the Organic Perspective when you just needed to re-do Plotted and Rough.

For the vast majority of your pages, your perspective looks really extreme, and while that's okay for some of them, it was advised that you err more on the side of having more boxes with shallower foreshortening. You seemed to have realized this by about the last ten or so pages, and then your main problem seemed to be getting your edge on the usually-invisible side of the cube to align with the other three lines of that axis, which is incredibly common and expected.

I know how hard this challenge can be, so I don't want to tell you to go back and redo it, but I would've liked it if you had done shallower boxes throughout. As long as you think you can draw shallow boxes well, I'll go ahead and mark you as complete and see what other people say. Then you can move on to Lesson 2.

Your Lines exercises seem to be in good shape. Not perfect, but about where you should be at this point in your studies. Though for your Table of Ellipses, you may not be drawing over your Ellipses enough (you seem to have only done it once in some cases instead of twice or three times).

You seem to have the most trouble with your Boxes, which is also natural. For your Organic Perspective, on the first page a lot of your boxes towards the "back" seem to be drawn in the same orientation. You corrected this for your second, but on that one your boxes didn't seem to diminish in size properly as they recede into the background. For yopur Rotated Boxes, I noticed that the boxes that are further from the center seem to go to the same vanishing point, which they shouldn't.

Though most importantly, you seem to have done only one row of the Plotted Perspective exercise, when the example suggests three. Normally I'd say you could skip it, since it's a pretty mindless and easy exercise, but your Rough Perspective looks like it's all over the place (and you also didn't do enough of that), so maybe going back to Plotted Perspective might help.

Beyond that, you did everything about right for now, so just go back and re-do the Plotted and Rough Perspective, then you can move on (and knowing what comes next, you'll probably appreciate the extra practice drawing boxes).

It is a pleasing composition. Your eye is led between the moon, the tree, and the salamander, and there is a good sense of the fundamentals overall (anatomy, form, space, lighting, etc.). However, I don't think you've fully told the story you wanted. I can see that the salamander is scared, and I can see that there are squirrels, but it's not entirely clear that the salamander is scared OF the squirrel(s) specifically. If I were doing the assignment, the prompt implies that it's some sort of chase scene, or you could have something like the salamander hiding while a squirrel seems to actively look for it (but that also doesn't cover the "scampered to down to the forest floor" part). You could also play up the size difference by showing the squirrel as much larger than the salamander.

It is a well-drawn image though, and telling exactly the right story with only a single image IS really hard, as someone who took a class in college that was similar to this. Plus, your prompt reads like it has two parts to it, which is even more difficult to tell in one image. I hope you still got a good grade with what you have!