Itsjustalex_218

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i finally finished the 15 boxes is this good?

First of all congratulations on completing lesson 1!

Sorry,I accidently said to give me more one more page of the funnels exercise so i wrote this here so you won't have to do the wrong exercise., I meant the ghosted planes with ellipses. Sorry for the mix up. Remember though to keep them confident and don't worry about accuracy.

Now to the critique, first critique is that you have fraying lines on both sides on the exercise you have to ghost your lines multiple times over each other. This isn't a big dealbreaker as you had only fraying on both sides sometimes. Its just something to keep in mind especially during the 250 box challenge in which you have to add line weight to your boxes.

I also see that your lines are wobbly and tend to curve. This is something you will perfect over time so no need to worry about it too much, just try to focus on keeping your lines confident. Also for curving lines, I would recomend what uncomfortable mentioned to purposefully arch you lines the opposite direction that way it will cancel it out and make it more straight.

Also your ellipses is something else I notice. I noticed that your ellipses are super wobbly. You are focusing more on making them fit into their boxes instead of keeping them smooth. Especially on the ellipses table and funnels exercises. I would say to focus on them being more confident than trying to fit them in. It doesn't matter right now if they don't fit in because we are working on making your ellipses confident than accurate.

On the rough perspective exercise keep in mind that your lines should be either parallel or perpendicular, when plotting in 1 point perspective. I also didn't know this when I first started until they told me.

on the rotated boxes and organic perspective exercise, i noticed your boxes had multiple lines drawn on them on one line of a box. I don't know if you didn't like the line you made or you were trying to add lineweight. Remember to ghost your lines and only mark the line when you are confident. Also I saw that you were shading all the sides of your boxes. I would recomend only shading one side of your boxes so its easier to read. If you shade all the sides it makes it less 3d and makes it hard to understand what you are seeing.

I accidently said to give me more one more page of the funnels exercise, I meant the ghosted planes with ellipses. Sorry for the mix up. Remember though to keep them confident and don't worry about accuracy.

congrats!

Now to the critique, Your linework is pretty good overall. Except for a little bit of wobbling here and there, and some slight arching. I would recommend to try to be more confident with your lines to fix your wobbly lines a little more. Also for the arching lines I would reccomend doing what uncomfortable said, which is to purposefully arch your lines in the opposite direction. Also arching lines tend to happen when you aren't fully using your shoulder pivot. Of course this is something you would get over time, so for now just try and get your lines to be more confident.

Next is your ellipes, for the majority of them I saw that they were clean and confident so good job. Once in a while I saw a circle or two that they looked like you were trying to make them fit into the grid tables especially the ellipses in which you had to fit them into the squares. Overall you did a good job with your ellipses, its just something to keep in mind, cause we can sometimes forget.

Your lines also for the persepctive grid using one point perspective is also good. I just wanna say that the lines should either perpendicular or parrel to the horizon. Just something to keep in mind. i just saw your lines were still a little arched, so they weren't parrel sometimes. Of course that comes with practice so keep up the work and you should get better.

In the organic perspective and rotated boxes is also good. I did notice that it was kinda hard to tell if you plotted your points before ghosting your lines. It might be the ink covering it, so nothing to worry too much. Overall very good. I would also recomend drawing the lines that go inside your boxes to better your understanding of 3d boxes, but thats something you will get plenty of practice in the 250 box challenge.

Overall very good. Just some things to remember. Don't forget to plot your points before anything. Don't forget to ghost your lines. Good luck and I hope you continue to grow as an aspiring artist. Level up up to 9,000!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

you can continue on

No problem, after talking to some of the people on the discord they have also picked up some things I didn't pick up.

-The student didn't ghost the ellipses properly, the ellipses must go from one end to the other, you shouldn't add an ellipse in the middle and then one close and then one above, that way it's difficult to tell what the intent was and if it's a successful ellipses. (I beleive he was talking about the ellipses boxes exercies, in which you must draw many ellipses in one box.)

• Tell the student to practice a wider variation of Ellipse's degrees, they mostly stuck with a few very similar ones, also to practice different sizes and perspectives of planes- (I beleive he was talking about the exercise in which you have to put an ellipse in the planes.)

• To have taken more time with their hatching, since it doesn't touch the edges I feel like they rushed through that part when it should also be nicely done, and in plotted perspective you can even do it with a ruler

Hello, first of all you finished lesson 1 in one day, bruh your work ethic goddamn amazing.

First thing I notice is your lines, your lines are very good, but sometimes they will curve slighty. I would recomend what uncomfortable mentioned to fix this problem, to purposefully arch your lines the opposite direction to even it out. It also tends to happen when you are not fully using your shoulder pivot. other than that, i see nothing wrong with your line work.

Your ellipses are also good, but I see that when you draw your ellipses that you tend to focus a little more on making them fit into the tables, and the funnels. I would worry about making your ellipses as smooth as possible, before worrying about accuracy. You will get better over time so its nothing to worry about.

Your boxes are pretty good, the only thing I see wrong is the arching lines sometimes, and on some boxes I notice there are lines that you go over as if you didn't like it the first time. Perhaps I am wrong, since there is so much going on in the organic perspective and boxes section.

Its also kinda hard to tell whats going in the organic perspective and boxes section and what box is what. . I would recommend going over twice and increasing the line weight on the lines that intersect with the other boxes next time. To show what box is which, since some boxes do seem to blend with each other.

Overall you did really good, Just those things that I mentioned although they seem minor, they make a massive difference.

Hello, Good job on completing on lesson 1! Now to get onto business.

First thing I notice is your line work in the lines section. You should place your starting point carefully. There should be no fraying at the starting point. Your lines are also quite wobbly. This will get better over time, so I would recomend instead of worrying about accuracy, worry about keeping your lines straight, and confident. Your lines also tend to curve in the organic perspective and rotated boxes, I would recomend to purposefully curve your line in the opposite direction. If this doesn't make sense I would suggest going back to the section where uncomfortable explains how to make a smooth line.

Another thing I notice is your ellipses, I notice that sometimes your ellipses will be smooth, but other times, they will be crooked as if you trying to make them fit. This is especially apparent with the ellipses tables. For now its ok if they are not fitting as long as you are making sure your ellipses are confident and smooth.

For the rough perspective you forget to use the line correction method. Make sure to use the line correction method as it is very important to the lesson.

On the organic perspective and rotated boxes, I noticed that your boxes do not have plot points, I don't know if its the pen ink that covers it when you make your lines, but I still wanna emphasize how important it is to plot your points especially, since you have to use this technique in the 250 box challenge. You also have to draw through the boxes, some of the boxes on the organic perspective and rotated boxes do lines drawn through them to show your understanding of your 3d form, Some do, but there are also some that are half finished inside. Don't forget to leave draw through your boxes. You draw through most of your boxes, except some of are half finished inside. So I would just recommend to not forget next time please.

First thing I notice, is that your lines, tend to wobble quite a bit. They also tend to curve slighty.

To fix this problem I would recomend trying to do what uncomfortable mentioned. To try and purposefully curve your line to the opposite direction, that should even it out. Also that tends to happen when when you are not mostly using the shoulder pivot. If you are using the shoulder pivot correctly, then purposefully curving your line to the opposite direction should fix it.

Another thing Is wobbly lines, this will get better over time, but they do tend to wobble, Especially when plotting the lines for the perspective grid without a ruler. I would recomend ghosting your lines,beforehand.

You also have some fraying on the super imposed lines, Its ok, for now as you practicing your confidence of lines more than accuracy, but still something to keep in mind in later parts of the lessons.

Also for the elipses, the degrees need to change when doing the circles in the funnels.

For the ellipses inside the table you are also trying to make them fit into the table than making them overall smooth. Practice on getting them smooth than accuracy for now.

Another thing I notice, is that when you plot your boxes on the perspective grid, without the ruler. Your lines tend to not be perpendicular to the horizon line. This is very important and something to keep in mind.

With your organic perspective and rotated boxes, I notice that on some of your corners of your boxes they randomnly will have fraying lines. as mentioned before, Its important to practice your ghosting method during times like this.

Good luck and I look forward to seeing your progress, it takes time and hard work, but the ones who persevere are the victorious.

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I assumed when u said repeating lines to stop drawing on the same line once I marked it.