6:08 AM, Saturday August 28th 2021
First of all congratulations on completing lesson 1!
Sorry,I accidently said to give me more one more page of the funnels exercise so i wrote this here so you won't have to do the wrong exercise., I meant the ghosted planes with ellipses. Sorry for the mix up. Remember though to keep them confident and don't worry about accuracy.
Now to the critique, first critique is that you have fraying lines on both sides on the exercise you have to ghost your lines multiple times over each other. This isn't a big dealbreaker as you had only fraying on both sides sometimes. Its just something to keep in mind especially during the 250 box challenge in which you have to add line weight to your boxes.
I also see that your lines are wobbly and tend to curve. This is something you will perfect over time so no need to worry about it too much, just try to focus on keeping your lines confident. Also for curving lines, I would recomend what uncomfortable mentioned to purposefully arch you lines the opposite direction that way it will cancel it out and make it more straight.
Also your ellipses is something else I notice. I noticed that your ellipses are super wobbly. You are focusing more on making them fit into their boxes instead of keeping them smooth. Especially on the ellipses table and funnels exercises. I would say to focus on them being more confident than trying to fit them in. It doesn't matter right now if they don't fit in because we are working on making your ellipses confident than accurate.
On the rough perspective exercise keep in mind that your lines should be either parallel or perpendicular, when plotting in 1 point perspective. I also didn't know this when I first started until they told me.
on the rotated boxes and organic perspective exercise, i noticed your boxes had multiple lines drawn on them on one line of a box. I don't know if you didn't like the line you made or you were trying to add lineweight. Remember to ghost your lines and only mark the line when you are confident. Also I saw that you were shading all the sides of your boxes. I would recomend only shading one side of your boxes so its easier to read. If you shade all the sides it makes it less 3d and makes it hard to understand what you are seeing.
I accidently said to give me more one more page of the funnels exercise, I meant the ghosted planes with ellipses. Sorry for the mix up. Remember though to keep them confident and don't worry about accuracy.
I would recommend to give me at least one page of the funnels exercises. Keep in mind to make your ellipses confident don't worry about fitting them in for now.