12:54 AM, Saturday July 3rd 2021
Starting with your arrows, you're definitely drawing these with a great deal of confidence right off the bat, but you definitely are having trouble with the marks you add on top. You are, correctly, only adding line weight in more limited areas (though always focus it on areas where you want to clarify overlaps between forms - so like right where the arrow bends over itself). What you're not doing (or don't seem to be doing) is applying the ghosting method to those marks. This should be used for all your marks, not just the initial ones, to both ensure a confident execution, but also enforce the investment of time in the planning and preparation phases to increase your control/accuracy.
Moving onto the leaves, that confidence I mentioned towards the beginning carries over quite well. You're doing a good job of capturing both how the leaf sits statically in space, as well as how it moves through the space it occupies. Looking at how you're building up your more complex edge detail, you're doing a good job of building right upon the existing structure, adding the pieces that change, and generally ensuring a very strong relationship with the previous phase of construction. Some of the markmaking, again, could be better. It's common for students to spend less time on each individual mark when there are many to draw, but this is a temptation you should resist. Give each and every mark as much time as it requires, to avoid the little gaps or overshoots that underline the solidity of your form.
Continuing onto the branches, you're doing reasonably well here, but aren't consistently extending your segments fully halfway to the next ellipse, as shown in the instructions. Doing so will help make your transitions from segment to segment smoother and more seamless, especially if you use its tail as the runway for your next mark, overlapping it directly rather than where it ought to have been.
Moving onto your plant constructions, you've done a pretty good job. You're employing the principles of construction, building up one simple step at a time, and are doing a good job of maintaining tight, specific relationships between those steps. The main overall issue is simply what I mentioned before - when you get into the smaller marks of a construction, you get somewhat sloppier, not necessarily planning and preparing before each execution. Other than that, I do have a few recommendations and things to keep in mind:
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Try to avoid drawing objects too small, and generally not giving them the space they really require from you on the page. I know you're enthusiastic to draw lots of these on each page, but it can actually limit your brain's capacity to think through those spatial problems, while also making it harder for you to engage your whole arm while drawing. This can contribute to some of the sloppiness when it comes to smaller details. Be sure to give every drawing as much room as it requires on the page, first and foremost. Once you're done, check if you can fit another drawing there. If you can, go for it. If you can't, it's okay to even have pages consisting only of one or two drawings, as long as the space on the page has been used well.
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Remember that the degree of an ellipse determines how that circle in 3D space is oriented. If it's wide, it's turned towards the viewer, if it's narrow, it's turning away. On this drawing, the contour ellipses/slices along the stem each look like they're turned towards the viewer, even though the stem is running more up/down in front of them.
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When you want to add more structure to a form, altering its silhouette by cutting/adding 2D shapes, it flattens it out. This works fine if you're drawing leaves and petals, because they're already flat. It's a problem, though, with forms that have more volume to them. So in cases like the plant at the bottom of this page, it's better to approach them like this.
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Once you hit the 'detail phase' of a drawing, I get the impression that your focus shifted to the general, vague idea of 'decorating' your drawing. To make it look better, and more impressive. That's tricky though, because it's not really clear when we've decorated it enough. It's kind of arbitrary and subjective, so a difficult goal to define. What we're doing in this course can be broken into two distinct sections - construction and texture - and they both focus on the same concept. With construction we're communicating to the viewer what they need to know to understand how they might manipulate this object with their hands, were it in front of them. With texture, we're communicating to the viewer what they need to know to understand what it'd feel like to run their fingers over the object's various surfaces. Both of these focus on communicating three dimensional information. Both sections have specific jobs to accomplish, and none of it has to do with making the drawing look nice. So focus instead on conveying what can be felt and touched, rather than simply what can be seen.
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Also, remember that as discussed in Lesson 2, your drawings for this course should not incorporate form shading, instead reserving the filled black shapes for cast shadows.
As a whole, I do think you could do a fair bit better if you invested a little more time in the planning and preparation of individual marks, but you're already doing a fairly decent job. So, I will go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.
Next Steps:
Move onto lesson 4.