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12:50 PM, Friday October 15th 2021

In my last round of feedback, I pointed out two main issues (specifically in this diagram drawn on top of your previous work):

  • You were not drawing the corner boxes

  • You were making the "extremity" boxes (step 3) more complicated than instructed - all you're asked for is a simple basic square.

These two issues are still present. While you're no longer trying to play with the perspective of those extremity boxes, you're still drawing a complete box when only a square is requested. In regards to the corner boxes, once again they're not there.

So, here are the same issues shown on your latest work. At this point, I'm really focusing a lot less on the quality of your work, and more on whether or not you're following the instructions. I suspect that because you're still heavily focusing on quality of the end result, you have a tendency to forget the specific things I'm calling out.

If you're not already, I highly recommend both reading through my feedback immediately before doing the work (so it's fresh in your mind), and immediately after completing your work (to check if you missed anything).

Next Steps:

1 more page of rotated boxes.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
3:54 AM, Thursday October 21st 2021

https://imgur.com/a/gdBrFXG

Yes, unfortunate in the previous attempts I was focus on the qaulity of the work. I also seem to have negelected the corner boxes in them. I was attempting to make the boxes obey a sphere; this time I tried to follow the exercise as close as possible.

My apologies; I will try to follow along as best I can from this point onward.

7:12 PM, Thursday October 21st 2021

For a second I thought you might have made the same mistakes again - but it seems you uploaded the same attempt as before. Perhaps you scanned the wrong page, or uploaded the wrong file.

8:20 PM, Thursday October 21st 2021

https://imgur.com/a/jivQJ06

Ah - upon inspecting it I realized that it was the previous attempt. Looking at the thumbnails they begin to bleed together.

This one is a 4x4 unlike the previous attempt. I'm usually careful about these things.

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