robdraws

Hi,

I really appreciate the feedback and will take it all on board.

thanks!

Looking good, keep using these exercises as warm ups as you move on to the next lessons! good luck!

Hi!

Good job finishing lesson 1, I'll do my best to give oyu some solid feedback :)

LINES:

1. your superimposed lines look good a bit of fraying and slight arcs on the longer lines but practice makes perfect!

2. ghosted lines are nice and straight and mostly hitting the right points, I notice the line weight tapers off towards the end so I assume you are doing quite quick lines and taking your pen off the paper before the end of the line, I would maybe keep this in mind going forward and practice putting down an even line weight, I realise it's difficult to do this and to get a straight/accurate line so just keep working on it!

3. ghosted planes are great, the line quality is really nice on these!

ELLIPSES:

1. I can't see a table of ellipses! wondering if you've missed it off in your upload?

2. I can't really fault your ellipses in planes at this stage of the process, they will simply get better with time, they are placed well within the planes and I can see you have gone over them multiple times which is good!

3. the ellipses in funnels are also good however I would have liked to see more variation of the degree of the ellipse as they move further away from the center, like you have done with the one on the far right.

BOXES:

1. No issues with your plotted perspective boxes, well done.

2. rough perspective boxes looking good, nice line quality and the lines converge nicely on or very close to the vanishing point, when drawing in one point perspective like this just be careful to keep the vertical lines vertical, there are a couple of boxes that have a sloping plane because of this, it's useful to compare them to the edge of your paper to get them right.

3. rotated boxes are great, I can see them turning in space so good job!

4. good job with the organic perspective boxes, in order to really drive home the idea of perspective you can really push the relative size of the elements on the page, make some really big and some really small, also I think you could have done more to make them overlap, this also helps to describe the boxes position in space.

All in all really good job, submit your table of ellipses and then I think you will be good to move onto the 250 boxes challenge! good work!

HI,

I'm really struggling to find anything that I can critique since all the exercises are done to a really high standard!

I'm not sure what you mean about your textures being more dynamic since I think you've done a really good job of wrapping them around the cylindrical forms and also breaking the sillouette in interesting and appealing ways in the dissections.

In the texture analysis You could possibly vary the shapes a bit more, considering contrast between large and small shapes to create a more appealing design.

The form intersections are really impressive, especially where cylinders and spheres intersect! and your use of line weight helps a lot in identifying the overlaps.

some of the cast shadows on the organic intersections could wrap around the forms they are cast onto a little bit better, there is one area where the cast shadow falls off the form it is cast onto and continues on the ground plane and it would be nice to see a more clear change in the angle of the shadow to illustrate this plane change.

Overall this is fantastic work, I think I can learn a lot by looking at how you approached these!

Hello there!

Good job finishing lesson 2.

Organic arrows are good, good job varying the thickness of the arrows as they go back in space.

your contour elipses are well done, they sit nicely on the organic form and clearly describe the cylindrical form, my one feedback regarding these would be to pay close attention to the degrees of each ellipse and vary them according to how the form turns, there are a few places where the degrees of the ellipses vary in such a way that it is hard to tell in which way the form is turning.

regarding the contour curves where you only draw one side of the elipse; your lines are clear and fluid however they are all rather flat and if you could see the full ellipse the degree would be very small. This is obviously fine and they can exist like this depending on their angle however I'm not sure this is the effect you are going for and it would be nice to see more variation and more of a curve in some of the cases to help better describe the nature of the forms. remember that while you aren't drawing the full ellipse, you still need to be able to feel how the full ellipse would be.

texture analysis is looking good, well done transitioning from the darker value ot the lighter value through your use of texture!

your dissections are mostly very good, you've done well to show the curvature of the forms through use of light and shadow from the outside to the center of the cylinders. my main feedback here would be to pay close attention to how the textures wrap around the 3d forms, I'll use the example of the palm tree bark. the horizontal lines can be used as contour lines to describe how they wrap around the trunk of the tree, at the moment they look a bit straight and flat.

form intersections are fine, I struggled a lot with this one so i know how mind bending it is! the actual construction of the forms is very good.

Organic intersections are feeling a little bit flat to me and I think its mainly down to your use of contour lines, it may have helped to draw through the forms a bit more as I'm not fully feeling the roundness of these forms. also you could easily improve the overall clearness of the drawings by adding some lineweight to show how things overlap and what is in front of what.

I hope this all makes sense! overall very well done, keep it up!

Thanks, great feedback, totally agree.

I definitely need to work on my line weight, I struggle with a pen after so many years drawing with pencil!

Hey!

Regarding lines section:

Most super imposed lines are great, however I'm noticing that a couple are frayed on both ends, try and slow down and purposefully place the pen when starting the line, ideally all the points on one end of the line should be concentrated to a small area.

In your ghosted lines and planes, some lines are looking a bit shaky but fairly accurate, practice using your shoulder and elbow will improve the confidence and smoothness of your lines. concentrate on one fluid motion.

Regarding your ellipses:

The table of ellipses are very accurate in terms of where the edges of your ellipses meet the edges of the tables so that is good, however some of them are a bit shaky, practicing the fluid motion will help greatly. Good work on analyzing your mistakes, this is a great way to improve quickly as you will know exactly where you need to make improvements!

The ellipses on the planes are in the correct place but again they are a bit shaky, remember to ghost the lines before commiting them to paper and draw from your shoulder as much as possible! also it looks like you may be going a bit slowly and carefully in order to get the ellipse in the correct place, you may need to speed up your mark making a bit in order to get a smooth confident line.

The ellipses in funnels exercise is very good! for the most part they are correctly positioned on the minor axis, I think you understand elipses well enough but just need to focus on the fluidity of the line. practise as much as possible and you will improve!

Regarding your boxes:

Your plotted perspective boxes are really good, no issues there.

Your rough perspective boxes are also very good, I can see that after the first few you got into the swing of it and all the parallel lines converge nicely on or very near to the vanishing point which is great.

Your rotated boxes are good, the lines are clear and I can see all the boxes turning clearly in perspective, I would suggest drawing a bit bigger than this though but other than that, very good job.

When it comes to the organic perspective boxes, In most cases it's clear where the boxes are in space, however I would have liked to see more variation in size to really show which boxes are closer and which ones are far away, the line quality of these boxes I feel Isn't quite as clean as your rotated boxes, keep drawing with your elbow and shoulder and ghost the lines before making them so you know where the line is going to be.

Overall I think you have done well and understood all the points, my main feedback would be to focus on the basics when it comes to making lines; ghosting, drawing from the shoulder and most importantly practice as much as possible! I think you are ready to move on to the 250 box challenge where you will have plenty of practice with your lines and also your understanding of 3D space, it's going to be tough so good luck!