HannahLyn

Congrats! I'll split up the critique into 3 sections: lines, ellipses and boxes.

Lines:

Good job on the superimposed lines. I can see you improved as you worked through them too - your second page shows less fraying and the lines are straighter than the first page. The wobbles in your lines likely come from overthinking the line a bit, so just use this exercise to warm up and focus on straight, confident lines more than accurate lines. In the future, do a few of these as a warm up, e.g. a few long and a few short to help practice your line confidence. Your ghosted lines are ok, but they do wobble a bit. Again the solution is confidence, and you can build confidence by making sure you ghost the lines plenty before drawing them. Ghost a few times deliberately and confidently, and then repeat the motion with your on the paper. You'll get lots of practice in the box challenge though! Ghosted planes are pretty good on the whole, you over- and undershot a bit on some of the sides but this is better than going too slow and wobbling, Placing the dots carefully on the corners and sides of the planes has meant you have fairly good accuracy overall. As i said earlier, just make sure you're not rushing - take your time ghosting confidently.

Ellipses:

You used the soace well with your table of ellipses and have varied the sizes and degrees well, so that's good to see. Some of your ellipses are a bit deformed though, and are a bit egg or sausage shaped rather than true ellipses. On the other hand, some of them are very good so you clearly have the ability, and you will get there with practice as long as you remember to ghost and draw from your shoulder. The same can be said for your ellipses in planes - some are very good and some are a bit deformed, but no major issues. Your funnels look alright too, but do you see that some of them are not aligned to the minor axis? They aren't symmetrical along the line that cuts them in half, which means they end up looking a bit lopsided. However, this is not all of them and you have done a good job overall.

Boxes:

Plotted perspective is very nice and clear. Some of your verticals don't quite look vertical, but overall good and you have kept track of all the lines well. Rough perspective looks good and you have extended the lines properly, which is a good skill to have. On the whole the lines are getting pretty close to the vanishing point, which is great! The main thing to watch out f9r is that your back face should match the front face in terms of shape. Some of yours look a bit distorted - when you plot out the dots for the back face make sure it matches the front. If the front is a square then the back should be a square too, for example. Great job on the rotated boxes - this isn't an easy exercise but you've made a good job of it. Just again remember to watch the back faces of your boxes. If the back faces don't match then it's a good indication that your vanishing points are different for different edges, I can see a bit of a mismatch on the box directly to the right of your centre box, whre the back looks wider than the front. Nice job on organic perspective too, but watch the angles in your starting Y shape - none should be less than 90 degrees otherwise you will end up with distortion, i can see a couple like that. Some of your lines are diverging rather than converging to the vanishing point, but you'll get more practice identifying and fixing that in the box challenge.

Overall nice job on Lesson 1! Have a look through and make sure you can see what I've pointed out above.

Well done on completing! Let's split up the critique into 3 sections, lines, ellipses and boxes.

Lines:

Generally well done on the superimposed lines - some on the second page are fraying at both ends, which suggests that you're not taking care to place your pen carefully at the starting point each time. Try doing just a few of these as a warm-up next time you draw, it can help loosen up your shoulder muscles a bit and get you used to drawing from your shoulder. Your ghosted lines are fine and actually have improved as you have gone onto the ghosted planes, with more confidence. There is one page missing of ghosted planes (and therefore ellipses in planes too) - please complete this and submit as a revision before I sign this as complete.

Ellipses:

Your tables of ellipses are nice, although some look a little squared off at the end. This can come from focusing too much on accuracy and not enough on flowing and drawing through confidently. They actually look better on the funnels I think and you have aligned then pretty well to the minor axis. Good job, but you do need another page of ellipses in planes as mentioned above.

Boxes:

Plotted perspective is good and clear. The rough perspective is pretty good too, but the red extension lines should have stopped once they hit the horizon, otherwise it gets a bit confusing. You got a few boxes pretty close to the vanishing point, so thatks great especially for this early exercise. The rotated boxes exercise is a really good attempt too - a few boxes are not quite rotated enouh but you kept the boxes all quite close and organised with no major issues. Just make sure the back planes of your boxes show a similar amount of perspective as the front faces. Your organic perspective frames are good too - boxes have a variety of sizes and orientations. When you get onto the 250 box challenge try varying the shapes a lottle more, like long thin boxes or short flat ones, etc.

Overall good job, let me know when you bave done the extra page of planes and ellipses and I'll sign it off.

Thanks for submitting for critique, I'll split it up into the 3 main sections. Overall though a good job, and you've clearly understood the exercises.

Lines:

Great work on the superimposed lines, overall confident, smooth and fraying only at one end. Some of the shorter lines on the second page have an arc shape, this could be because you're using your elbow more for the shorter ones, just keep this in mind. The ghosted lines and ghosted planes are pretty good too, some wobbles on the lines and a couple of points where it looks like the line has curved slightly to meet the point, this should improve with practice as long as you are aware of it.

Ellipses:

Both your ellipses in planes and in the table are very nice and smooth, generally meeting the edges and not warped, nice job. Your funnels are good too and I can see you've made the effort to align them to the minor axis. Some of the middle narrower ones look a bit pointy but overall really nice.

Boxes:

Plotted perspective is perfect and you've kept track of your lines well. The rough perspective is good too, it looks like you had a bit of confusion with the extensions initially but have corrected that on the later frames. Hopefully you can see the perspective errors, and ghosting a few times to the vp will help hitting the vp more accurately in future practice. Your rotated boxes page is not bad at all, of course there are some distortion issues but you've rotated the boxes well along the middle cross and the bottom right corner is done correctly, well done with that. I suggest revisiting it once you've done some of the 250 box challenge (just do one quadrant or something) to see if you understand it better after more practice. The organic perspective page is good and there's nice variation in size, rotation and shape of boxes. Some lines diverge rather than converge to the vanishing points, but you will get the hang of how to correct that in the box challenge.

Hi! Congrats on finishing your Lesson 1. I agree you did well and I hope you found the process interesting! I'll split up your critique into 3 sections to make it easier to take in:

Lines:

Good job with the superimposed lines - you have been accurate with your starting points and have kept the lines smooth overall. There is some fraying as expected, but only on one end so that's good to see. Some of your straight lines (both long and short) are wobbling a bit, which usually comes if you're concentrating too much on keeping it on the ruler lines, and ot letting your shoulder do the work. The wavy lines are actually smoother and more confident, so bring some of that to your straight lines. Your ghosted lines and planes look good too, some wobbles but you've used the space well and got lots of practice so this is good.

Ellipses:

Your table of ellipses is nice and varied with a good mix of large, small and different degrees. You've drawn through them well too. The ellipses in planes look good too and you've made a good attempt at getting them to meet the edges of the plane without sacrificing roundness. I think your funnels are especially good, and it looks like you've tried to get each one level with the minor axis and even if one in the funnel is tilted slightly you've made sure to correct the next one and not ended up with them all tilting.

Boxes:

Your plotted perspective is great and you've kept your eye on where the lines are going and nothing looks confused. The rough perspective page is ok but you have misread the instruction on extending the lines. The lines should only be extended back to the horizon line, not crossing the horizon. Then you can properly see how far away your lines are from the vanishing point. On the whole though the boxes themselves look ok and you're on the right track with them. Your rotated boxes page is pretty good! You've done better on the left hand side than the right, because you've shifted the vanishing points a little more as you've moved to the left, which has given them a more rotated look. Nice job. Your organic perspective looks good too, nice variation in box side and orientation.

Hi, congrats on finishing the first exercise! Overall I think this is a really good job and you've understood the purpose of the exercises and kept your lines confident and flowing. I'll break down the critique into a few sections to make it easier for you to digest:

lines:

Your superimposed lines flow nicely, you placed each line accurately so it starts at the right point, and you have some fraying as expected but no noticeable wobble so I think you completed this exercise well. It's probably a good one to repeat for a warm up as I found it loosens the shoulder up quite well! Your ghosted lines are nice too, some curve a tiny bit to try and meet the second dot, but when this doesn't happen then your lines are nice and confident and straight. the same goes for your ghosted planes and I think your ghosting has improved a little here with some very straight lines. A few wobbles here and there but nothing bad at all.

Ellipses:

Really nice work on the tables of ellipses and the ellipses in planes. You've filled the space, kept them round and drawn through them the recommended number of times. There's also a nice mix of larger and smaller ones, with your large narrow ellipses especiallu good. In the funnels exercise it looks like you had a bit of trouble keeping the ellipses aligned with the minor axis - your middle ellipses started off a bit angled so when you drew the rest they align with the middle ellipse and not the axis. This means they're not all totally symmetrical but this is great for the first time doing this exercise so just something to keep in mind for the next time you do ellipses.

Boxes:

Plotted perspective is very pleasing and you didn't get your lines mixed up, which is a good sign. Your line weight and shading is all correct so it looks like you understood this very well. The rough perspective exercise has been done well too, and you've extended all the lines properly to help you understand the mistakes - there don't seem to be any misunderstandings or major mistakes. The rotated boxes are great, especially the left hand side! The right hand side isn't quite rotated enough but not to worry. The organic boxes frames look fun, and you've made good use of the frame and varied the sizes and orientations of your boxes nicely. There are quite a few where your outer lines are diverging away from the vp (e.g. top right in frame 2), just keep that in mind as you go onto the box challenge. Your vps should lie along the lines of your starting 'Y' - try plotting out a box with a ruler if you're having trouble visualising how the convergence should look.

All in all this looks really great, enjoy the 250 box challenge!

Thanks very much for taking time to critique my pages and also for the helpful suggestions. Also a good point on trying shorter superimposed lines, I think I actually find the short lines harder than the long lines. Were there any specific problems with the boxes that I should focus on with the box challenge, or do you think it's enough to just get stuck in with the 250 boxes? Thanks again!

Congrats on finishing the first lesson! i would say a bit of practice on linecontrol is needed perhaps - the first page oflines are a bit frayed at both ends, which suggests you were maybe rushing a bit without starting at the same point. however the second page of lines is definitely improved and looks confident and smooth. sone of your straight lines in both the 2nd exercise and some of the box exercises seem to have a bit of a 'flourish' rather than being controlled and straight - this maybe comes from flicking your wrist towards the end so perhaps be conscious of your shoulder drawing and take breaks if needed. i think your ellipses are especially good and well aligned, touching the boundaries just like they should be!