6:34 PM, Sunday December 5th 2021
Hi, I'm Avinier and would be pleased to critique your work today!
Lines
Superimposed Lines- Overall great work in drawing the lines, pretty confident, even with the lines of larger lengths.
Ghosted Lines- At first, your lines seem wobbly, and tend to 'undershoot' (upper quater of the page). But those mistakes seem to be rectified in the later lines, there are falsies in the accuracy but confidence is prevalent, so good work.
One major issue though- there aren't enough variations with the position and angle of the lines. The lines were meant to be very random and different, so that the rotating page technique would be in full use.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/10/example -here is the example homework.
Now it's fine, but do keep this in mind.
Ghosted Planes- Lines are great, consistent and the accuracy part has been taken care of, so nice progress.
But again, the same mistake as in the previous homework, lack of variation, the planes are supposed to be as random as possible, while some vary in size, they seem to be in one row and lot of parallel lines, do take care next time.
https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/11/example
Ellipses
Table of Ellipses- They are confident, within the table bounds and superimposed 2 times, so very good. If I have to nitpick something, it would be that most ellipses are of one particular size (surfboard shaped), wider ellipses could have been made, but good.
Ellispses in Planes- First page seemed quite wobbly and not accurate enough, I think you haven't applied the ghosting method because it seems a bit rushed. Second page is a drastic improvement, all the shortcomings of the first page have been rectified, great. The second time you draw the ellipse, it is quite less accurate though, but fine work.
Funnels- Here the progress of ellipses really starts to shine, amazingly drawn ellipses, minor axis position is well placed, and accurate, great.
Boxes
Plotted Perspective- As expected, well done, but you should hatch the face view sides to make a distinction (keep this in mind during the 250 box challenge).
Rough Perspective- A very good effort considering first time, boxes seem to be very organic, while positioning is great, lines are quite inaccurate, but great work.
(It was mentioned in the lessons that "width lines should be parallel to horizon and height lines perpendicular to horizon", some boxes have a genuine mistake regarding this but some you have consciously made differently. I personally would give this a thumbs-up, this type of bending the rules is quite okay for me, because you challenged yourself here, unlike in the previous mistake, so kudos on that)
Rotated Boxes- Excellent work, this one is one of the hardest exercises of lesson one and you have done it naturally, well done!
Organic Perspective- Again, results didn't matter here but you have done them flawlessly, at this point you seem to be a natural in boxes, very impressed!
Next Steps:
I'm sure you might have already started the 250 box challenge, if not, you should do it, I would love to see how your boxes turn out!
