4:05 PM, Thursday July 16th 2020
Hi Azimuthzero,
The first thing I notice in your work is that all of your lines and ellipses are kinda wobbly. Probably you tried to draw correctly to the aimed destination but that made you lose your confidence in doing straight lines. Please remember, the lesson 1 helps you to focus more in feeling the flow of your hands than trying to control your lines with your mind. Don't be afraid of overshooting or undershooting or even miss the points completely. Please try to draw with your shoulder, it helps to straighten your lines better.
Now let's go to each section.
In Superimposed Lines, I can see that you draw with confidence, hence, some of your lines are straight and not wobbly. All your lines start at exact one place at the beginning, this is good. In Ghosted Lines, your lines become wobbly a bit, even though they are straight. Some lines are arc, which is the result of using knee or your wrist to draw.
In Table of Ellipses, your control in making second strike goes as the first one is good, they are really close with each other. But again, you tried to control to much by your brain, the ellipses are really wobbly. Somehow, I see that Table 1 is better than Table 2. In Ellipses in Planes, you have done a good job in making planes without missing the points. I can see that you tried to put the ellipses inside of the planes, some are out of the planes but in general, they are in control. The Funnel shows that you put the ellipses in right place, the axis split them in half nicely.
In Rough Perspective, please remember to use ruler to draw the horizon line. In Rotated Boxes, the boxes look rotated in my eyes, that's good. In Organic Perspective, please remember to make the boxes that are closer larger and those far away smaller. Some boxes are small then the bigger is next to it then the smaller one come later, which make me confused. One tip is that you can imagine these boxes in this exercise are the same size. Just larger in one head of the swoopy line and they become smaller when it comes to the tail of the line.
And for all of the box exercises, please don't try to fix the lines, if it missed the point, than it missed, don't try to correct it. Correcting makes your work looks clumsier. Moreover, when you put hatching lines to the front-facing faces of the boxes, please also use Ghosted Lines method to do it neatly. These lines of yours look like you used your wrist to draw it hastily. As Uncomfortable said, it is optional, if you decided to do it, make sure it neat and tidy.
Next Steps:
As the purpose of the lesson 1, draw with confidence, so I want you to make some revisions. I want you to re do 1 Ghosted Line, 1 Rough Perspective, 1 Table of Ellipses, 1 Organice Perspective. Warm ups before doing exercise can help to improve your lines. Take your time to do many ghosted lines before the actual one can help too.