12:57 PM, Wednesday March 9th 2022
Hello! Reggievalestorm5.
I've saw your submission has been sitting here for quite a while now, So i hope you don't mind if i would critique on your submission.
Arrows.
One thing that i saw in your submission is that you're posting the same pages of arrows, You should be posting a Different page of arrows instead since the exercise asked for 2 different page. With that said I'll move on and critique your work regardless.
Your arrows are a bit mixed in term of line confidence, Some are confidently drawn while others aren't, Some even have Chicken Scratchy feeling to them, Always remember that a confidently drawn line is better than multiple stroke. In this case i recommend you ghost the curve of the arrow before drawing it, And then trying to replicate the second stroke with the same motion as the first. In one fluid motion and line.
But other than that. I think your arrows are actually doing pretty well in term of conveying the illusion of 3d.
Organic forms with contour curves / ellipses.
My opinion for this exercise also felt a bit mixed. I think your main takeaway here would be Ellipses / Contour curves Degree change. If you look at the example in the exercise page. Here You can clearly see that the degree of ellipses change according to how they turn in space.
Imagine a coin facing toward you, At first you'll see them as a circle, But as you progressively turn the coin away from you. You'll slowly see the ellipses getting thinner and thinner. Until eventually it became a line (Not literally but just a very thin ellipses.)
Another second point i would like to make is When you're drawing sausages form. Keep them SIMPLE. as you see here in the example that Mr.Uncomfortable provided Here You'll see that he kept his sausages very simple. As i saw right now. Some of your sausages have their ends at different size and some widen up in the middle like an ellipses.
And my last final point is. It's better to draw less ellipses that does their job well. Instead of many ellipses that are mediocre at their job. Try to keep them roughly 3-4 Ellipses or contour curves per sausages form since more than that might be an overkill.
Texture analysis.
In this exercise. I can clearly saw your effort toward observing the shadow shapes instead of lines. So well done! And i can clearly see your mark are being placed purposefully.
One minor thing i would like to nitpick is You're not doing the seamless transition for the gradient one. This So don't forget to do this next time you're doing this via a warm up.
(Little thing i would like to mention is that your second row of gradient felt a little weird. Like you're including the first and the third texture into it. If this isn't the case then please ignore this message, However if it is always remember not to put them together since it might cause a bit of confusion.)
Dissections.
In this exercise you're being a bit shy with breaking the silhouettes. Don't forget that breaking the silhouettes will helps in conveying the illusion of the texture you're drawing actually exist in 3d space. Instead of a flat piece of paper.
While this one is a suggestion I think it might be great if you consider it too. I recommend you do the gradient for this dissection exercise too although uncomfy example doesn't show any gradient. I think it's a good practice too. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/7/final
Finally. When drawing form. Don't enclose on them fully, Instead leave some space left since we're not drawing outlines of the form. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/drawingforms
Form intersections
The first thing that jumps out to me is that Quite a number of your form isn't actually equilateral. Try to stick to those which have roughly the same height width and lenght.
And some of your form felt a bit stretched, For example quite a bit of your pyramid is stretching. Try your best to kept foreshortening rather shallow since if you didn't it'll distract you from the main focus of the exercise.
Organic intersection
Lets move on to the final exercise of lesson 2. The sausages party
For the first page i saw quite a bit of your form that isn't actually simple, Some actually widen up in the middle like Ellipses Instead of sausages. As usual Keep your sausages simple. Simple 3d form is better received as 3 dimensional rather than complex ones.
Secondly is Some of the form are actually a bit non-stable. https://imgur.com/a/aHF4Utb
Try to think of them as water-balloon.
**The other side will sag when you hold them on one ends, And both will sag when you hold on the middle part
Next Steps:
I would like an additional revision a bit.
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2 Pages of arrows. (Both the revision and the additional one.)
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2 Pages of Organic form (Both contour curves and ellipses.)
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1 page of Organic intersection.
Focusing on what i've critiqued above.
Best of luck!