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7:02 PM, Friday October 1st 2021

Starting with your leaves, these are for the most part looking quite well done. There's just one small point I noticed - for this more complex leaf, each of those arms should be constructed as its own separate leaf structure, then merged together. I had another student approach a similar leaf in that manner, and put together this quick demonstration for them. While I've got two viable options (either just treating it as a simple leaf and cutting back into the silhouette or treating it as a complex leaf structure) presented there, I feel in your case the second option of sticking to treating it as a complex structure would be most in line with your leaf.

Continuing onto your branches, I am still noticing an issue that the flow of your edges seems to break pretty sharply whenever you hit a bend or a curve. This, along with a few more obvious cases where you're not following the instructions of overlapping segments to achieve a smoother, more seamless transition (like here), I do still suspect that you're not following these instructions as closely as you should. Please review the feedback I offered on this exercise in your initial submission, specifically the first point.

In terms of the second point, I can see some shift in the degree of your ellipses. This should definitely be pushed and exaggerated further, but as a whole it's moving in the right direction. Lastly, be sure to draw through each and every ellipse you freehand throughout this course two full times before lifting your pen, as discussed back in Lesson 1.

Continuing onto your plant constructions, for the most part these are being handled fairly well. There is really just one overall suggestion I have to offer - draw bigger, and give the first drawing of a page as much room as it requires, rather than artificially limiting it so you can fit more drawings in later on. Only when you're done that drawing should you assess whether another one will fit - if it will, certainly add one in order to make full use of the page. If nothing else will fit however, it's perfectly okay to leave it to just one drawing, so long as the space is being put to good use.

The reason for this is that our brain benefits from being given more room to think through spatial problems, and it also makes it easier to engage our whole arm while drawing. These are both things that we will improve at doing in smaller, tighter spaces as we progress, but we must first get comfortable with doing them at larger scales, eliminating any other complications now, so that later we can focus more on the specific concerns of working smaller. Throughout this course, always aim to give yourself as much space and time as you require.

Now while your branches are still not quite addressing the points I raised, I am going to leave you to deal with that on your own with the feedback you've already received. I trust you'll review them appropriately, and I don't think this is something to hold you up over.

I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 4.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
9:46 AM, Saturday October 2nd 2021
edited at 9:47 AM, Oct 2nd 2021

thanks

edited at 9:47 AM, Oct 2nd 2021
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