5:51 PM, Thursday May 20th 2021
Starting with your organic forms with contour curves, it's good to see that you're using that central minor axis line this time, and your contour curves are wrapping around the forms nicely. There's just two things to keep in mind:
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You don't appear to be sticking as closely to the characteristics of simple sausages as closely as you should be. You frequently end up with one end smaller than the other.
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Make sure you draw through each of your ellipses (the ones you placed on the tip of your sausages) two full times before lifting your pen, as discussed back in lesson 1.
Moving onto your insect constructions, I think as a result of your time away from this material, you may have slid backwards in some ways. If we compare this one from your recent set to this drawing from your previous set, there are a few issues I'm seeing present in the newer ones:
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You appear to be trying to sketch an underdrawing more faintly before committing to your marks by tracing back over them. This is fundamentally against the markmaking principles of this course, and I think that maybe in your time away, shifting focus towards other approaches, you've allowed yourself to loosen your grip on those key concepts. It is totally fine to try other things, but when you come back to Drawabox, you are still going to be held to the same standard, with the expectation that you follow the instructions for this course without mixing in contradictory approaches from other sources. So when you make your marks, use the ghosting method, and execute them with confidence. Do not attempt to draw more hesitantly or hide your marks, and do not trace back over your existing lines.
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I think you may have spent less time observing and studying your reference image in this newer one than the older. The older one shows a lot more attention being paid to the specific nature of the individual forms you're capturing and adding to your construction, whereas the newer one has a lot more oversimplification going on.
As a whole, I think you may have jumped back into your Drawabox revisions without necessarily accounting for where you may have gotten rusty and forgotten things. A month away isn't a huge break, but since it's clear that you've let some of your habits slip, I think it's best for you to review the core principles from lessons 1 and 2 (don't have to redo the homework for them, just read through them again and watch the videos), and then get back into the swing of doing their exercises as part of your regular warmup routine. That warmup routine is basically what keeps us from getting rusty.
Once you feel comfortable with those warmups again, you can try your hand at these same revisions again.
Next Steps:
Please repeat the revisions requested in my previous critique.