Hey I finally did these revisions, sorry it took so long I took a break and started practicing some gesture drawing and got busy with other stuff. Hope these pass the mark!
Starting with your organic forms with contour curves, it's good to see that you're using that central minor axis line this time, and your contour curves are wrapping around the forms nicely. There's just two things to keep in mind:
You don't appear to be sticking as closely to the characteristics of simple sausages as closely as you should be. You frequently end up with one end smaller than the other.
Make sure you draw through each of your ellipses (the ones you placed on the tip of your sausages) two full times before lifting your pen, as discussed back in lesson 1.
Moving onto your insect constructions, I think as a result of your time away from this material, you may have slid backwards in some ways. If we compare this one from your recent set to this drawing from your previous set, there are a few issues I'm seeing present in the newer ones:
You appear to be trying to sketch an underdrawing more faintly before committing to your marks by tracing back over them. This is fundamentally against the markmaking principles of this course, and I think that maybe in your time away, shifting focus towards other approaches, you've allowed yourself to loosen your grip on those key concepts. It is totally fine to try other things, but when you come back to Drawabox, you are still going to be held to the same standard, with the expectation that you follow the instructions for this course without mixing in contradictory approaches from other sources. So when you make your marks, use the ghosting method, and execute them with confidence. Do not attempt to draw more hesitantly or hide your marks, and do not trace back over your existing lines.
I think you may have spent less time observing and studying your reference image in this newer one than the older. The older one shows a lot more attention being paid to the specific nature of the individual forms you're capturing and adding to your construction, whereas the newer one has a lot more oversimplification going on.
As a whole, I think you may have jumped back into your Drawabox revisions without necessarily accounting for where you may have gotten rusty and forgotten things. A month away isn't a huge break, but since it's clear that you've let some of your habits slip, I think it's best for you to review the core principles from lessons 1 and 2 (don't have to redo the homework for them, just read through them again and watch the videos), and then get back into the swing of doing their exercises as part of your regular warmup routine. That warmup routine is basically what keeps us from getting rusty.
Once you feel comfortable with those warmups again, you can try your hand at these same revisions again.
Next Steps:
Please repeat the revisions requested in my previous critique.
Hey sorry it took so long again, Ive been back and forth between states and havent had time to sit really sit down and give it a real focused effort, but I finally got back to my regular routine. If I have to do them again it will only take about a week this time.
Starting with the organic forms with contour lines, the contour curves themselves are coming along very nicely. The contour ellipses you're placing at the tip of the sausages however aren't so great - they all seem to be drawn as circles, rather than having their degree roughly match the contour curves that precede them. So you might have a fairly narrow contour curve just before on the top left of this page, which suggests that the form is flowing across our field of vision (rather than coming straight at us), but you're still drawing a really wide ellipse right after, which tells us that the sausage is coming towards the viewer.
As for the insect constructions, it appears that both of the drawings you've done here are copies of the demonstrations themselves. While these are allowed to be part of your original submission (though they must make up less than half of your total submission), this is just to get you started before you go on to tackle your own references and attempt the problem solving on your own.
When you get revisions, it isn't terribly useful for you to submit work that was just done following along the step by step demonstrations. The revisions are assigned so you have the opportunity to demonstrate your understanding of the material, how to apply it yourself.
I really hate to do this again, but try the revisions a third time. Your line quality and construction is coming along decently, but it just doesn't make sense for me to accept demonstration drawings for these revisions.
Next Steps:
One page of organic forms with contour curves (instead of two), two pages of insect constructions from your own references. I want to see that you are able to apply the principles from the lesson on your own work, outside of just following along with the demonstrations.
Here we're getting into the subjective - Gerald Brom is one of my favourite artists (and a pretty fantastic novelist!). That said, if I recommended art books just for the beautiful images contained therein, my list of recommendations would be miles long.
The reason this book is close to my heart is because of its introduction, where Brom goes explains in detail just how he went from being an army brat to one of the most highly respected dark fantasy artists in the world today. I believe that one's work is flavoured by their life's experiences, and discovering the roots from which other artists hail can help give one perspective on their own beginnings, and perhaps their eventual destination as well.
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