7:16 PM, Friday April 17th 2020
There is definitely progress here, especially in how I can see signs that you're thinking more about how forms wrap around one another. There are however signs that you're being somewhat sloppy when it comes to the actual execution of your lines, which suggests to me that you have it in you to do far better.
I've put some notes on top of your moose. As you can see, there are a number of issues that come from sloppiness, for instance:
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You're not employing the sausage method entirely correctly. You're close, but you're sometimes drawing stretched ellipses instead of sausages, sometimes the ends of your sausages are of different sizes, and pretty much across the board the contour curves you add at the joints don't wrap around the forms properly. Refer back to these notes from the contour line exercise from lesson 2.
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You have a tendency to square off one end of your additional masses, instead of continuing to round them off. Remember that these masses are like water balloons that you're piling up over one another. They don't get sharp corners.
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With the legs especially, you're vastly oversimplifying things. Rather, you're putting down a basic sausage chain, but not much more. Moose legs have plenty more going on with them form-wise, but you're largely overlooking it. Remember that once you've got your sausage structure in place, you can add further masses to it as shown here.
Now your constructions are getting better in a big way, but there are a lot of places where I think you're just allowing yourself not to put in 100% of what you can into each and every stroke. Remember that you should be applying the ghosting method to every line, taking the time to think about the specific job every mark is meant to accomplish before preparing and executing with confidence.
I suspect that if you're tackling all of these drawings in a single sitting, that you may be focusing on getting all of them done during a set period, rationing your time between them. So, to that end, I'm going to ask for one more drawing - draw another moose, and invest as much time into each and every mark, each and every component, as you can. Furthermore, keep looking back at your reference - construction starts out simple, and breaks down into greater levels of complexity. You understand this, based on the bulk of your torso and head, but you need to be able to break down that complexity across the entire body, legs included.
Next Steps:
One more drawing of a moose. Antlers not required.