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4:19 PM, Friday December 23rd 2022

Hi! I'll be critiquing your work today.

Organic intersections - These look good for the most part, though there are some key flaws, since in some areas it looks like: you forgot to establish any contour lines on the form (making them seem somewhat flat) or drew them in a confusing way (see the bottom-left form on the first page); you didn't finish drawing the outline of the form (see the top-right form on the first page); or your shadows didn't properly follow the contour of the form it was falling on (see page 2) or contradicted each other in general, making it confusing as to what it is in front of each other. Overall quite good, but these small mistakes do detract from it.

Birds - These both look quite good, and the forms feel very solid and 3D, though the wing on the first bird might be a bit small (I'm not sure though since I don't have the original reference image). Overall, great job!

Foxes - First fox: looks great. It was a very smart idea to establish the perspective with the plane at the bottom before drawing. When adding additional forms, I'd suggest drawing them as one, continuous form, instead of the individual blobs you drew on the fox's back. Second fox: The form feels quite solid, but the bottom region is quite confusing with all of the overlapping lines. I'd suggest adding line weight and shadow to certain areas to make them more distinct and readable.

Oryx - Looks good, very solid form. The rocks in the background of the second one feel kind of like they're floating, so I'd suggest adding another straight line (higher up then the one you've already established) so that it's clear that they're on the ground.

Bears - In terms of form these are okay - though the bear does appear a bit too sausage-like in shape and a bit unstable. In terms of proportions I feel that these are lacking a bit (however proportions and accuracy aren't really the focus of this exercise, so this doesn't matter). In general I would suggest adding some more contour lines to your forms, as this can help to give them greater solidity.

Rhinoceroses - The thigh sizes on the first rhino seem a bit too small, however I can't say this for certain since (again) I don't have the original reference images for these. Overall, okay.

Barreleye Fish and Whale Shark - The smooth gestural lines (which didn't have as much time to shine in your previous drawings due to their other issues) give these drawings a great effect. Both drawings feel very solid and confident, and it's clear what's happening in the image. These look great!

Hybrid (if i'm not mistaken, this is the last image) - feels very solid, good implementation of different animal features.

Overall, quite good understanding of form and structure (though with a couple of issues did crop up). I'd suggest redoing the Organic Intersections exercise, implementing my critiques as you do so.

Next Steps:

Please redo the Organic Intersections exercise.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
12:35 PM, Wednesday January 4th 2023

Hi, thanks for the review!

Quite accurate and clear. I think it will take me some time to correct the things mentioned.

I have tried to simplify my shapes and shadows in correcting the assignment. Here it is for you to proofread when you have time.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1SV46IVS8hQ81r1CtnT_ynIsSldYVxx7M?usp=share_link

1:54 PM, Wednesday February 15th 2023

Hi! Sorry for replying so late (I haven't looked at my Drawabox account for a while).

Anyway, these look great. These definitely feel clearer and more solid, though the two on the top left (with one sausage lying on top of another) looks a bit strange. I think you might not have followed the contour of the form underneath, so it looks a bit flat. But besides that, it's looking good.

I'll mark this as complete now.

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2:22 PM, Wednesday February 15th 2023

I understand, I'll keep practicing these for a while.

Thanks for replying!

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