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6:48 PM, Tuesday March 2nd 2021
edited at 6:49 PM, Mar 2nd 2021

I was admittedly concerned when you came back with your revisions just a few hours after receiving the critique. I went to bed at 8am (a long night of critiques), and you'd posted your revisions within an hour, so they were fresh and waiting for me when I got up. That usually suggests that the student hasn't had the time to properly process the feedback they'd received and apply it to the requested drawings.

That said, your work is indeed looking fine. The legs could certainly be taken a bit further, and I think that closer observation and study of your reference would help you identify those additional forms a little more easily (working with high resolution reference images helps with this as well), but despite the overall simplification of the construction, the forms themselves are well constructed. Just note how much complexity can be found on an insect's leg, as shown in the ant leg I shared previously.

One additional piece of advice I have is that you should try to avoid the sort of "hotdog in a bun" look we get when we take an additional mass and just rest it flat against a sausage segment as you did here. Try to twist the additional mass a little bit as it wraps around the sausage structure, as shown here, to make it feel more organic and natural. Also, pay attention to how the silhouettes of those additional masses are shaped to specifically convey how they're gripping that structure, rather than ebing pasted on top of it.

This is something we'll continue practicing throughout Lesson 5, so I'll leave you to it and we'll address it more then if it is necessary. You can consider this one complete.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 5.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
edited at 6:49 PM, Mar 2nd 2021
7:25 AM, Wednesday March 3rd 2021

Hmmm, one hour is a bit strange. My timestamps shows 8.29 AM for the initial critique and 3:16 PM for my reply. I had nothing to do yesterday during my shift so I worked on the revisions throughout. Was this maybe a timezone...bug? xD

(I work as a software tester this sort of thing piques my curiosity)

Anyways, that's still good feedback. Sometimes this one forgets the importance of letting things sink in. I'll also practice on the side to improve those legs :3

Take care!

8:02 PM, Wednesday March 3rd 2021

No bugs here - just regular timezone stuff. You see the time stamps in your time zone, I see them in mine. So on my end, it was 2:29am for when I posted the critique, and 9:16am when your revisions were submitted. 7 hours is a pretty quick turnaround time!

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