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7:19 PM, Sunday May 9th 2021

Hey! I'm gonna start off by saying that they are looking much better, and also your cast shadows are getting there.

However, it seems like sometimes your sausages are falling a little flat, here are some corrections on two of them, see how they are way closer than before, though they are having some issues with what I've just said.

As I said, your cast shadows got better, but you are still sticking them to the sausages that cast them, instead of making them follow the contours of the ones that are being cast on. Here are some corrections that I hope they help!

So, I will be asking for one last revision, I really think that you are about to really grasp this concepts, so I'm gonna ask you for one more page of this exercise and try to pile more sausages if you can!

I'm sorry how long this is becoming but I'm doing it because I really feel like you will get this concepts. Good luck and feel free to ask me anything on discord.

Next Steps:

1 last page of organic intersections.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
11:25 AM, Tuesday May 11th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/o0TDqRi

Still don't get some of the cast shadows. Following the contours of the form below is fine but sometimes I swear they're completely incompatible

12:49 PM, Tuesday May 11th 2021
edited at 1:20 PM, May 11th 2021

Okay, I really like seeing that you are experimenting with the exercise and I think that you are really close, though I want you to check out this correction and compare it with your exercise. While your forms are wrapping more convincingly to each other and feel more solid, they are not wrapping around the silhouette. Remember that in order for a sausage to go over the other side and stop being visible for us (even though we have to draw through all of our forms), it needs to be behind something, and in the case of this sausages it needs to wrap all around the form, and it starts falling to the other side, once it's over the silhouette.

I've highlighted just the 3 forms that directly fall on top of the big base form because the more top one depend on how this first ones position themselves. Notice that you just need to draw them a little higher so they match the silhouette!

Regarding cast shadows, they are much better, though don't worry if you can't exactly realize how the cast shadows fall on form, this is something you will practice more with shading.

So, one more page, I don't wanna say it's the last since I kind of jinxed it last time, but I feel positive that you are getting close.

Go get it.

Next Steps:

1 more page, remember how forms wrap around other forms silhouette.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
edited at 1:20 PM, May 11th 2021
1:42 PM, Wednesday May 12th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/EA4ARnj

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