7:43 PM, Thursday February 18th 2021
These are coming along well! Your branches and leaves look especially well done, and your plant constructions are solid. I have just three things for you to keep in mind:
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Don't go back over things quite as liberally as you have, without good reason. Drawing through ellipses is fine and encouraged (though remember that you're only supposed to do it 2 times before lifting your pen). Looking at the mushroom's cap, you went back over it a lot. Line weight isn't meant to be so heavy and obvious - it should be subtle, like a hint you're giving to the viewer's subconscious, to clarify how certain forms overlap. You also don't need to be reinforcing the silhouettes of your structures if there's nothing further to clarify.
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I'm noticing a tendency to press a little harder on your pen when drawing the later phases of construction. For example, here, when adding the additional edge detail to your leaves, you tend to do so with a darker mark than the original edge. No need for that. Line weight itself is something we add at the end, once we've got all the forms and construction down. If we try to vary the line weight like that earlier on, we end up in situations where we have line weight on the interior of a given structure, rather than at its edge.
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As I mentioned in my original critique, don't get caught up in the need to decorate things. Texture and detail is better off added with a light touch. You're doing better here than before, so that's great - but here you've shifted more towards filling in the spaces between the veins, rather than focusing on each being a cast shadow relating to the vein forms themselves. Make sure every cast shadow shape you draw clearly relates to a given form that is casting it. It's very easy to slip back into just filling in negative space between forms instead, especially when we get particularly heavy with texture.
Anyway, I'll go ahead and mark this lesson as complete. Keep up the good work.
Next Steps:
Move onto lesson 4.