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1:16 AM, Wednesday December 15th 2021

Hi there, I'll be handling your box challenge critique.

Not only does the challenge help deepen your understanding of important concepts but it shows your desire to learn as well. That being said I'll try to keep this critique fairly brief so you can get working on the next steps as soon as possible.

Things you did well:

  • Good work drawing your construction lines confidently, this keeps your lines smooth and prevents wobbling.

  • It's nice to see that you're taking the time to plan each of your hatching lines and space them evenly. This helps keep your boxes looking tidy rather than looking like they were rushed on to the page.

  • Seeing as how line weight is not a requirement of the challenge it's nice to see that you're applying it. It's a useful tool but one that most people need some mileage with before they feel comfortable applying it. Getting an early start like this will help you see better results sooner.

  • You're doing a great job of experimenting with orientations, and proportions. Experimenting is an important habit to build when learning any new skill, it helps form a more well rounded understanding. I hope you'll continue to display and nurture this habit in the future.

Things you can work on:

  • Try not to redraw lines when you make mistakes, learning to work with our mistakes is par tof hte reason we use ink. I'm glad to see that you end up doing it less frequently as you progress through the challenge.

  • I'd like you to experiment with rates of foreshortening more. Currently you keep your vanishing points quite far from your boxes and your lines fairly close to parallel. Remember that experimenting is important so trying bringing your vanishing points in closer to see how your lines react when they converge more dramatically.

  • There are times when your lines converge in pairs or you attempt to keep your lines a bit too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening.

The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.

I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds off concepts in the previous course material so if you move forward with un-addressed issues you end up just creating further issues on top of them.

Your boxes are looking pretty solid so far but I want to make sure you can shift the position of your vanishing point and adjust your rate of foreshortening before moving you forward. For now I'll just be asking you to draw an additional 10 boxes, if it appears like you're struggling to converge your lines more dramatically we can address the issue. If you look fairly comfortable doing so then it shouldn't take too long and I'll have no problems moving you on to the next lesson.

Once you've completed your boxes reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready I'll move you on to the next lesson.

I know you can do this and look forward to seeing your work.

Next Steps:

10 more boxes please.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
7:25 PM, Wednesday December 15th 2021

Hi Tofu,

Thank you for looking these over, i've uploaded 10 more through this link - https://imgur.com/a/LOu1DHo

Kind regards

Tom

11:03 PM, Wednesday December 15th 2021

While these are looking good, you are still sticking to roughly the same shallow rate of foreshortening, and are not experimenting with more variation.

Please try another 10, this time being sure to play with both shallow and dramatic foreshortening.

Next Steps:

10 more please.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:04 PM, Thursday December 16th 2021

Hi Tofu,

I've drawn some more boxes, i've tried to focus more on bringing the vanishing point closer to the boxes on some sides:

https://imgur.com/a/lA2AaZu

Kind regards

Tom

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