Hello all,
Thank you for taking the time to look through my work.
This is a re-submission for Lesson 1: Lines, Ellipses, and Boxes (I have previously received critique before subscribing to the Patreon).
Please ignore the written labels (in ink at the top of each page) as they are incorrect. I have labeled them correctly in Imgur's system and they will be labeled at the bottom of every image.
Hello and congrats on completing lesson one. My name is Rob and I'm a teaching assistant for Drawabox who will be handling your lesson one critique. Starting with your superimposed lines these are off to a fine start. You are keeping a clearly defined starting point with all of your wavering at the opposite end. Your ghosted lines and planes turned out well. You are using the ghosting method to good effect to get confident linework with a pretty decent deal of accuracy that will get better and better with practice.
Your tables of ellipses are coming along pretty good. You are doing a good job drawing through your ellipses and focusing on consistent smooth ellipse shapes. This is carried over nicely into your ellipses in planes. It's great that you aren't overly concerned with accuracy and are instead focused on getting smooth ellipse shapes. Although accuracy is our end goal it can't really be forced and tends to come with mileage and consistent practice more than anything else. Your ellipses in funnels are looking fine. I'm not seeing any real issues here. One thing you could have done with these is start with a narrower degree ellipse in the center and then widen the degrees of the ellipses as they move outwards in the funnel. Please check the example here. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/step3 Your ellipses are off to a great start but there's still room for improvement when it comes to accuracy so keep practicing them during your warmups.
The plotted perspective looks great, nothing to mention here. Your rough perspective exercises turned out okay but are unfinished. You are getting a mix of confident linework here along with some wobble creeping back into some of your lines. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/wobbling This is probably happening because you are more concerned with accuracy now that you are constructing boxes and you are slowing down your stroke to compensate. The other reason this is happening is you appear to be reverting back to using your wrist while adding line weight. Adding line weight is fine but make sure you treat it like any other line you would for these lessons and ghost it multiple times and draw from your shoulder with confidence. So the big issue here is that you didn't finish this exercise. You were supposed to extend the depth lines on your boxes to check your work. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/step6 Make sure you read the instructions fully for each exercise. So as a revision I'd like you to do just that for these pages and resubmit them.
Your rotated box exercise turned out decently. I like that you drew this nice and big as that really helps when dealing with complex spatial problems. You also did a good job drawing through your boxes and keeping your gaps narrow and consistent. So obviously you are still struggling a bit with some of the rotations for this exercise particularly towards the corners which is fine given the difficulty. This is a great exercise to come back to after a few lessons to see how much your spatial thinking ability has improved. Your organic perspective exercises are looking pretty good. You seem to be getting comfortable using the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder for confident linework which is great. I do want to discuss your added line weight here a bit more. As I said previously adding line weight is fine but if you decied to do so make sure you only go over a line one more time. On a lot of these you are simply burying your orginal linework by going over a line multiple times. Your box constructions definitely could use some improvement as they are pretty wonky throughout so the 250 box challenge will be a great next step for you.
Overall this was a solid submission that showed a nice deal of growth. Your line confidence and ellipses are both coming along nicely. Other than not finished the rough perspective box exercise I think you are understanding most of the concepts these lessons are trying to convey quite well. Once you get that revision submitted and I take a look you can most likely move on to the 250 box challenge.
Next Steps:
Extend the depth line on your rough perspective boxes https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/step6
Thank you for your thoughful and extensive critique!
I got to work immediately on extending those depth lines (hadn't even noticed, you're right I do have to read the directions more thoroughly).
I have already completed the 250-box challenge (Just signed up the Patreon so I had to resubmit lesson 1). Am I right in understanding that I have to wait 2 weeks from when this is marked as complete to submit the 250 boxes for critique?
Okay so these extensions look fine. As you can see some of your perspective estimations were quite off but that will become more intuitive with practice. Yes, there is a 2 week wait from after I mark this as complete which I will be doing right now.
Next Steps:
The 250 Box Challenge
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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