11:37 AM, Saturday August 28th 2021
Hi! Good job on completing Lesson 5. Here's my critique:
I noticed that your drawings look a little flat. I think it's because you aren't properly building up or straight up ignoring your constructed forms when drawing the animal.
I will use your 6th drawing of a cat as an example, as I think it is the most obvious one.
If you look at Lesson 5: Major Masses, you can see the that the torso in the dog demonstration is constructed from connecting the Ribcage and pelvic ellipses together into a sausage.
In your Cat drawing however, you constructed a torso with the same method, but then proceeded to ignore the entire construction when you drew the rear of the animal. You did the same thing with your horse drawings as well.
If your original construction was too small, you should have added more forms onto the original pelvis until it is the size you wanted, or just drew a larger ellipse to represent the pelvis instead and ignored the smaller one. Point is, you don't want to just draw the form of the animal without any construction to guide you as the forms are there to make you think in 3D. Without it, it is very easy to slip back into thinking in 2D and thus the lines you draw will end up looking flat.
Next Steps:
Follow and recreate the Running Rat Informal Demo and the Donkey Informal Demo, step by step. I think that should give you a good idea of how to lay out the initial construction.
If you are still confused, you can follow along the other informal demos as well. Especially the first few steps of the initial construction, because I think that's where the main issue is.
