Hi, I'm Nobody, and I'll be handling your critique today. A word on my criteria, I use Elodin's pastebin post as a checklist. I'll consider this Lesson complete if all Sections have been completed throughout. A section is completed if you have made no less than a third of the mistakes outlined in the post. A mistake is considered to be made if it appears persistently, or occurred more than a quarter of the times (of course, this is done with the assumption of two pages for that exercise. If the exercise is only a single submission, then the criteria is a third or less). If the mistake is minor, or I feel that it'll be worked out with practice, I'll note it but won't count it.

That said, let's get started.

Lines

Overall, your lines look good. There's no fraying on both ends, you're not prioritizing accuracy over a smooth and confident stroke, and at least in this section you haven't gone over the lines again to correct your mistakes. One thing I'd like to point out is that some of your Ghosted Planes have signs of arching in them. Because it doesn't appear in your other submissions, I'll assume it to be the result of struggling with the exercise a bit.

Overall, I'd call Lines done.

Ellipses

Your ellipses need some work. There's some deformation in some of the ellipses, however, and I'd ask that you redo the Ellipses in Planes exercise with a focus not on trying to force your ellipse to fit into the plane, but instead on make a smooth, consistent ellipse. Other than that, your Ellipses section is fairly good.

After redoing Ellipses in Planes, Ellipses will be done.

Boxes

Overall, Boxes is almost cleared. I'd ask you to redo the Rotated Boxes exercise, as you have made the mistake that not all of your Boxes were properly rotated and instead just sliding along the point. Remember, when a box rotates, the vanishing points slide along the horizon line. This means that the farthest corner moves closer to the inside corner, resulting in greater deformation of the shape (as a reference, the box on the 3 o'clock position would look more like a triangle than a proper box). Some other points to note:

• Your Plotted Perspective, while overall done very well, has some problems in some of the boxes where you've accidentally deformed the back edge or missed it. This wasn't significant enough to impact your overall performance, but I felt it noteworthy enough to point out;

• Your Rough Perspective shows that you may or may not have been feeling frustrated or weren't fully paying attention during the exercise, as some of your lines are incredibly sloppy.

• Your Organic Perspective exercise is extremely sloppy, and you've not properly shaded in the side. Your hatching should be done on one of the front faces of the boxes, but the second page's last two panel has clear examples where you've hatched in the back face of the boxes instead. Additionally, your hatching is extremely sloppy as well. Hatching should be done with clean, straight lines that were drawn from the shoulder. After every line, lift your pen, reset, ghost out a new trajectory, and draw in a parallel line.

After redoing the Rotated Boxes exercise, you'll be able to move on to the 250 Boxes exercise.

EDIT: WAIT! BELAY THE ORDERS! I didn't realize this submission already had a critique, ignore the requirements on this one. I'd like it if you keep the advice in mind, and that it's helpful for you, though.

Lines

Superimposed lines look confident. I can see they fray at the ends but this will get better with practice. There are lines I see , curved lines where there is fraying on both ends. Remember to place the fineliner on the start of the line before moving it to the end. After ghosting the line until you are confident with the motion of course. Ghosted lines look confident, As well as the lines of the ghosted planes.

Ellipses

Ellipses in the table of ellipses look nice and confident, same as ellipses in the funnel. in the planes I can see you drew these slowly trying to make them fit inside the box. You should ghost your ellipses where you want to place them, once confident with the motion draw in the ellipse with speed like those in the table of ellipses. Do not draw them in slowly. I also see some ellipses drawn through 4 times. Ellipses should be drawn through a minimum twice and maximum thrice. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/12/drawingthrough

Boxes

Plotted perspective looks good. I see in the bottom panel you struggled with the placement of the lines in the back. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/step7 For rotated boxes , copying the video lesson line for line can help you understand it better. In rough perspective your boxes are distorted, remember here the horizontal lines of the boxes are paralell to the horizon and the vertical lines are perpendicular to the horizon.

Organic perspective looks okay. It does not look like you plotted your lines here, plotting helps greatly.

I will ask for revision 1 page rough perspective, 1 panel. Remember plot your lines, keep track of the vertical and horizontal lines in referece to the horizon.

Good luck :).