10:50 AM, Monday November 2nd 2020
Hi Yojoki!
You took the first big step finishing Lesson 1. Now let's review your work step by step.
Superimposed Lines are very good. In a few instances there is fraying on both ends of your curved lines (which admittedly are way more difficult). Keep an eye on that, the pen must be placed carefully on the starting point every time you commit to a line.
Ghosted Lines look great. Most of them are confident and smooth, which is the priority.
Ghosted Planes: one page is missing. Lesson 1 asks for two pages of Ghosted Planes (and so of Ellipses in Planes). Hence I'd like to see one more page. Remember to plot your midsection lines with dots, because that is an essential step to help you ghosting lines properly.
Tables of Ellipses show a good progression toward smoother and confident lines, but there's one mistake worth mentioning: one shouldn't draw through the ellipses more than three times. The rule is no less than two and no more than three times, or the lines will be too messy to be useful.
Starting from the Funnels I notice a progressively less mindful approach to the work in general. Ellipses here are less clear compared to the ones in the Tables and more wobbly than confident. This results in the minor axis not cutting through the ellipses in two symmetrical halves. Also don't forget to draw the minor axis or you won't have a concrete goal to aim for.
Plotted Perspective is good enough. However you forgot to draw the vertical line in the back corner of your boxes. In the last frame of the second page it also looks like you didn't use a ruler to extend your lines. A piece of paper would do but be sure that is stable enough to let you draw a straight line.
Rough Perspective is okay. As I already mentioned, it looks like after a certain point you rushed things a little bit. In the first frame you didn't check the convergences, which is a crucial step. You also hatched only some of your boxes; this isn't a mistake in itself but it makes the work look sloppier and should be avoided.
The Rotated Boxes page shows some boxes that rotate effectively and a general good attempt at it. However some boxes are missing and few of them are not complete (you should draw through each one of them, regardless of how good or bad the end result may be). Lineweight should be added with confident ghosted lines, and solely to the part of lines to overlap. Don't apply it more than one time for each line or you'll create those focal points that should be avoided.
On the Organic Perspective try to keep further boxes smaller to give the viewer a better sense of depth. I'd like to point out though that you didn't take the time to draw the frames inside the pages. These frames are important to start thinking about the page as a window on a 3D space.
One last note: the spiral binding of your sketchbook won't help you rotate the paper comfortably during the planning phase of the ghosting method. It's better to detach each paper before you attempt your homework.
Now I would like you to do an extra mile and redo some of your homework:
1 page of Funnels: focus on the orientation of the ellipses and the number of times you draw through each one of them. Also focus on confidence before accuracy.
1 quadrant of Rotated Boxes: choose one quadrant and draw all the boxes required and don't forget to draw through each one of them. Simply complete the assignment at your current best ability.
Choose: 1 frame of Rough Perspective or 1 frame of Organic Perspective. I'd like to see a frame drawn properly with a ruler and an attempt to follow all the instructions of the relative lesson.
1 page of Ellipses in Planes, which was missing.
I hope you don't feel discouraged. You are on the right track.
Good Luck!
Next Steps:
1 page of Funnels: focus on the orientation of the ellipses and the number of times you draw through each one of them. Also focus on confidence before accuracy.
1 quadrant of Rotated Boxes: choose one quadrant and draw all the boxes required and don't forget to draw through each one of them. Simply complete the assignment at your current best ability.
Choose: 1 frame of Rough Perspective or 1 frame of Organic Perspective. I'd like to see a frame drawn properly with a ruler and an attempt to follow all the instructions of the relative lesson.
1 page of Ellipses in Planes, which was missing.
Good Luck!