the second lesson was harder than the first...the texture analisis was the one that took more time, but the forms intersections really put me to think...that was hard...i will keep practicing though...i need so much more practice...but it is fun...i really like this course. thanks for take the time to look my work and if you can give some good advice i will be thankful.
I'm working on lesson 2 corrections myself, so I'll critique your submission using what I've learned so far.
I admire the amount of detail you've achieved with your textures. They are very pleasing to look at, and they effectively capture the objects they are representing. The main area of your submission that could use improving are the basics involving the organic forms depicted in the drawings.
Simplify your organic forms. Here is the link explaining the traits that your organic forms should have. All the organic forms you've drawn are elongated, and a good amount of them also have ends of different sizes. Since you're very talented when it comes to detail, take time to focus more on the fundamentals of these exercises like the shape and size of the organic forms.
Different degrees of Ellipses. There is some variance, but the majority of your ellipses and contours are too similar. You want to use each ellipse to establish the organic forms in 3-D space, which also helps your brain deal with rendering 3-D objects on a page. Follow this link to read more about this on the assignment page. There is also an overabundance of ellipses and contours on each of your organic forms but that will correct itself if you focus on simplifying the shapes. You'll naturally have a more compact organic form, and that will make it easier to place the ellipses with relevance. Putting fewer organic shapes on a page and making them larger could help as well.
Markmaking. Try not to draw a second line over an earlier line to try and hide it and correct the mistake. This principal is mentioned in the Form Intersection Lesson, but it applies to all Drawabox lessons.
The work you've done here is really good, so you should move on to Lesson 3 when you're ready. The main thing for you to focus on are basic, foundational things that we'll both be working on as we continue forward with Drawabox. If you want to spend anymore time with Lesson 2 before then, try the organic contour ellipse and organic contour curves exercises again and consider what I listed above.
Thanks for reading, and good luck!
thank you for taking the time to do a critique to me. i will try my elipses in my warm ups, and now i saw what you say about my organic forms...they are all elongated like you said... markmaking is really a problem for me, maybe i lack of confidence still...so i will pay special atencion to that specially... again ...thanks for your critique...:)
No problem. Good luck with lesson 3!
Just want to add that the first intersection page is supposed to be only boxes. I would recommend you redo that one. Also, the organic intersections are awesome but missing a bit of softness. The "cucumbers" are not melting on each other, they look hard in consistency, not a big deal but just something to consider.
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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