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9:57 PM, Thursday October 15th 2020

Hello, alittlemad. Although I've really only done Lesson 1, I've repeated the exercises a couple of times since I last submitted so I think I can give you some helpful critique.

**LINES**

Superimposed Lines: There's a bit of fraying on both ends up your superimposed lines, which is not good. This means you're not markmaking from your starting point and may not be putting much thought into each stroke you make. Also, your lines sometimes arc in one direction. Try to correct this by only using your shoulder to draw each line. You don't have any wobbly lines, however, which is really good.

Ghosted Lines: You often fall short of one point in this exercise. If you can recall the three levels stated on the page where this exercise is introduced, I'd say you're on Level 2: your line trajectory is consistent (line isn't wobbly) but you miss one or both points (in this case one). But it seems you no longer have this problem on the later exercises (Boxes), which is good.

Ghosted Planes: Your diagonals don't always bisect the plane. And your lines arc sometimes. Your accuracy in markmaking has improved though.

If you are concerned about improving your lines specifically I suggest repeating the Ghosted Planes exercise. Remember to take breaks. 

**ELLIPSES**

Tables of Ellipses: Good job drawing through ellipses and drawing them with confidence. Your ellipses didn't stay within the bounds all the time and they often overlapped with one another.

Ellipses in Planes: Your ellipses aren't deformed nor do they float but they often don't touch all four edges of the plane.

Funnels: Your ellipses fit inside the funnel but often are not aligned to central minor axis; the minor axis should cut each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves. This is very important, especially for construction. Your ellipses were properly spaced though, which is good.

All of these exercises are useful when trying to get better at drawing ellipses but they way I see it Tables of Ellipses is more for engraining muscle memory while the others are more for practical use like constructing 3D forms. That's just my opinion though.

**BOXES**

Rough Perspective: Good.

Plotted Perspective: Horizontal lines were not consistently parallel to the horizon line and vertical lines were not consistently perpendicular to the horizon line.

Rotated Boxes: You did not attempt to rotate your boxes at all. There are sets of boxes that seem to have the same vanishing point. (I also struggled with this exercise, though.)

Organic Perspective: A lot of your boxes are distorted. If you're intentionally using dramatic forshortening, I advise you refrain from doing so in this exercise.

Overall, you did a good job.

Next Steps:

Go onto the 250 box challenge; it should help you get better at drawing boxes. Also, practice drawing ellipses, you may need to do so on the upcoming lessons. And don't forget to take breaks and review old lessons and exercises you've already completed. Have a good day. :)

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4:58 PM, Saturday October 17th 2020

Hi

Thank you so much for critiquing my homework really appreciated

you have pointed out some good things n thanx for the advice on ellipses

I did struggle a lot on rotated boxes think they just got worse n worse with every other box

but in the end, I think I know how to fix my mistakes I might try doing it again

9:09 PM, Thursday October 22nd 2020

No problem

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