9:41 PM, Saturday June 26th 2021
Hi! I feel like you understood the core principle of each exercise, so you should move on. There are indeed plenty of mistakes, but don't worry because everybody makes them. I'll list all the mistakes I see in cased you missed some:
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organic arrows - try not to be so confined by the size of the arrows. Almost none of them are overlapping, which is making them lose their 3D nature. Go wild with their small to large transitions and overlapping!
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organic forms with ellipses - I'm noticing some wobbly ellipses which may be caused by the slowing down of your pen
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form intersections - some intersections are weird, but the form relations are there which is what matters. For example a cone and box intersection you have on the 3rd page - the intersection forms on the plane of the box, not the cone. If you have a 3D program you can test these interactions there to understand them better. The boxes (also on page 3) are fine, you just gotta think about how the middle box intersects with the box and the cylinder. Think about only one intersection at a time. Also, remember the rule how a cylinder's further plane is supposed to be larger, not the closer one.
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organic intersections - all good, just remember that the cast shadows take the shape of the underlying object, not the object casting them
Next Steps:
Instead of repeating exercises from the lesson, do them as warmups before future lessons. Here's a list to help you out, from most important to least important:
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the ellipse exercise from lesson 1 where you fill out the whole page with ellipses. Your ellipses require more accuracy and this should help you gain that. I recommend doing this lesson as a warmup on multiple days.
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ghosted planes from lesson 1 - some of your lines are wobbly. If you're rushing, remember to stop yourself and ghost the line properly (confident controlled ghosting instead of going back and fourth in the air)
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form intersections - even though the form relations are good, some of your forms are wobbly. Drawing more forms never hurt anyone, also you'll make sense of some intersections as you do them more.
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organic arrow exercise. Just so you let loose with them. You don't have to repeat this after you do what I mentioned in the critique correctly.
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organic intersections - Just so you do the cast shadows properly. You don't have to repeat this one after that as well.
Just choose one or two of these per day, that should be fine.
