Hi, I'm Laura, I'll do your critique.
Superimposed Lines - mostly fraying on one side, which is expected, but there are a few lines where there's fraying on both sides, give yourself a bit more time to put down your pen on the starting point, otherwise it's pretty good.
Ghosted Lines & Ghosted Planes - Pretty good, there's some arcing, can be helped with more consciously using your shoulder to execute the strokes, and trying to intentionally arch the line in the opposite direction to cancel it out if it persists, as well as rotating your pages.
Understood and well executed the Lines part of the lesson.
Table Ellipses - Decently done, drawn through 2-3 times as instructed, a bit messy, try to minimize movement from the elbow or wrist(This section helps with more explanation https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/remember), and try following through the ellipse as closely as you can on the second rotation as well as ghosting each ellipse before you even put it down, and try to experiment going faster or slower with each ellipse to see what turns out better.
Ellipses in planes - Same as the previous one, but try to not worry as much about fitting the ellipses exactly inside planes, smoother ellipses are more important initially.(And I see a lot have only 1 rotation through them, make sure you go through the ellipses at least twice, but no more than thrice, try going a bit slower.)
Funnels - All have the right rotation, most fit their borders, and most are exactly divided by the minor axis, try to fit the ellipses more tightly, start your circle touching the previous one, that can help, and draw through your ellipses at least twice, a lot of the ellipses here have only 1 rotation.
Overall you understood the assignments, but you would benefit from trying another page of funnels and table ellipses with the tips mentioned, I won't request a revision for it, but try to do it and send it here if you want.
Plotted perspective- Good, though I see the hatching lines can get a bit chaotic, ghosting the hatching lines can help, as well as not making them so dense, tight together.
Rough perspective - Only some arcing in the lines, otherwise pretty good.
Rotated boxes - Drew all the boes, rotated them(though the second rotation is a bit shallow and hard to see, make sure to increase it next time), the gaps were kept mostly consistent, you did well.
Organic Perspective - Some of the boxes have diverging lines, but that's okay, you'll get plenty of practice on that with the 250 box challenge, and the scaling based on depth is a bit too shallow to see(https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/22/step9), but all the boxes look like they are in the same space otherwise. I'll ask for at least one section of organic perspective with more size differences based on "depth" in the image(i.e smaller boxes on one end of the line, gradually getting bigger to the other end of it)
You understood the concepts taught mostly.
Did well overall, but could use some deliberate practice on the ellipses, and organic perspective didn't show much depth.
I'll ask you to do one section of organic perspective, focusing on having the boxes get smaller as the travel along the line.
Next Steps:
1 section(third of a page) of organic perspective with a focus on showing depth, having boxes farther along the line get smaller.
Here's are my revisions. My pen started dying in the middle of the mini eclipse table unfortunately. Switched to a new one in the middle of the funnels.
Good job on the ellipses, they're noticeably smoother, fitting them should get better through practice.
As for the organic perspective, you did well, boxes have good converging lines, a good variety of rotations, they all feel like they occupy the same space, and get smaller with depth in the image.
Only thing I have to say is about the hatching, it looks a bit rushed, I would recommend to ghost those lines too, it would help with consistency and getting them to end where they should.
I'll mark it as complete, add all lesson 1 exercises to your warmup pool and move onto the 250 Box Challenge.
Next Steps:
Add all lesson 1 exercises to your warmup pool and move onto the 250 Box Challenge.
Thanks!
Could you elaborate on what you mean by warmup pool? Does that mean that I should do some lesson 1 exercises before I work on the first 50?
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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