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1:08 PM, Tuesday May 25th 2021

Hello Kensa, I've checked your submission and I will now give you my thoughts on it.

To start with, you have a good basic understanding of how boxes are constructed as can be seen in the fact that you have extended all lines on the boxes perfectly. Your line quality is pretty good too. There are a few things I have to say about your line weight. In some boxes you've added a bit too much line weight. This is a tricky balance to achieve. Try adding line weight in passes where in each pass you do not add more than one line over an existing one. Apart from that, try controlling the wobble you have when adding line weight. You obviously can make better lines just that you need to apply line weight with patience. This brings me to your hatching. The way you've hatched these boxes is incorrect. Don't scribble over a face to hatch it in this course.You need to be more patient with it. Take the time to ghost every single line to hatch the surface properly.

The biggest problem I have with your work here is that you haven't done a lot of boxes in dramatic foreshortening and an alarming majority of your boxes have perfectly parallel lines. You have made significant improvements in drawing boxes with parallel edges and edges that converge slightly by the end of the challenge. but, I see that even towards the end, you struggled with boxes that had dramatic foreshortening. I think you should repeat and draw 15 boxes in dramatic foreshortening. Do not forget to hatch these properly.

Next Steps:

15 boxes in dramatic foreshortening and proper hatching

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
2:01 AM, Friday June 4th 2021

Hello! Thank you for reviewing my work. I hope this works time it's better, tried to do more dramatic foreshortening, was trying to be less lazy on my hatching, and hopefully better line weight.

https://imgur.com/a/I2igUg3

7:00 AM, Thursday June 10th 2021

Yup, lots of great improvement here. You're still kinda struggling with dramatic foreshortening but you are actively zoning in the areas that you tend to mess up. The line weight is much better in general and the hatching's improved too.

I'd say you're good to move on to lesson 2. The remaining improvement's going to come through practice, the only reason I held you back was to make you more aware of the fact that you need to work on dramatic foreshortening.

Next Steps:

Lesson 2

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