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10:31 PM, Thursday October 15th 2020

Hi there!

Firstly, about organic forms. Main issue is that you're still doing mainly stretched ellipses instead of sausages.

To help to get this shape more right, you can use dots to help you ghost the sausage form. Give it a try as it might help.

Lastly, the contour ellipses are still not accelerating enough. I recommend ghosting the complete ellipses, not just the curve when drawing them to make it easier.

About organic intersections your forms are still not going across the other sides of the forms. If you look at a side view of the drawing you did you'd see something like this. As you can see 4 is stable, but 3 and 2 are only on one side of the organic form 1, so gravity would make them fall with time.

The thing I showed you before should help with it. Try to think about how the organic forms would fall over the other side and how they fall on top of the other sausages, as if they were water balloons.

So, just to make sure you understand these concepts, I want you to do:

1 page of organic forms with contour curves

1 page of following along uncomfortable's video demo of organic intersections

1 page of following along the demo I posted.

and after it one page of organic intersections on your own.

Feel free to apply the dot thingy to those pages as well. Good luck and keep it up!

Next Steps:

1 page of organic forms with contour curves

1 page of following along uncomfortable's video demo of organic intersections

1 page of following along the demo I posted.

and after it one page of organic intersections on your own.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
9:33 PM, Friday October 16th 2020

Hi! Did my revisions: https://imgur.com/a/yYFEKCI

Spent some time trying to get my sausage shapes and contour ellipses right. I think they came out a little better, but I'm still not entirely confident with them yet.

I feel like I understand organic forms a little bit better, I'm now thinking about making sure they're supported and not going to slip. Not entirely sure that I've hit the nail on the head with this exercise yet though given what I've managed to produce. Tried my best at any rate! :)

Thanks a lot for all of the feedback ^>^

6:25 PM, Saturday October 17th 2020

Alright! looking much better now, specially the organic intersections. You still have some trouble with the organic forms themselves when drawing them alone, but the organic intersections are more solid now.

Did some corrections on your organic forms, the curves are getting better but you still have some issues with the forms.

Here is something that might help you to fix this issue you have with doing tubes that don't have consistent width. You can use it this on the dot stage to help you with the planning. Imagine the curse and try to mimic them with dots to visualize them better when ghosting.

Organic intersections are like I said much better, the issue you're having right now is that the shadows aren't following the forms they're being casted on.

Drew over yours so it made it a bit more clear.

Overall good progress like I said, keep up the good work and congratulations on finishing lesson 2! Good luck with lesson 3!

Next Steps:

Lesson 3

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