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11:57 PM, Wednesday April 19th 2023

First off, good job completing lesson 2! Your boxes looked really good as far as I can see. As for some things to look out for here are some of the things I noticed:

1. The most noticable thing I saw right off the bat was the arrows. The excercise is supposed to make you more comfortable with perspective regarding organic objects. Don't be afraid to overexaggerate the width of the parts where the front and back overlap. The further away the back part of the arrow is, the more "movement" or loops there will be. This is simply because objects that are further away from you appear closer to eachother. 

2. Your textures looked really good except for one thing: the shadow of the silhoutte. A way you can make sure your textures really pop is to add more shadow to the silhoutte, and less to the parts that are closer to the viewer. Think back to the texture study exercise where you essentially create a grey sclale for your textures, just wrapping around the texture itself.

3. The last thing I noticed is your organic sausage forms for the organic intersections excercise. when you draw the base sausage that form that the others will be resting on, you should make sure that the form is also formed with the thought in mind that it's curving, and that the ends of it have width just like the others instead of pinching at the ends. 

Other than that, your form intersections looked really good, and so did everything else. I think you should do the dissections exercise again using the method I mentioned, but only 1 page should be enough.

Next Steps:

Just follow as I listed above, and submit 1 page of the dissections and I will mark as complete.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
12:03 PM, Monday April 24th 2023

Hello MurcDirty,

Thank you for your detailed viewpoint and appreciation.

  1. About arrows, it was quite a big journey. As a result of the warm-ups, I managed to progress. I think I grasp what you implied about the perspective of organic object and I am totally agreeing with you.

  2. Regarding the texture exercise, I looked at Scyllastew recordings and some reviews after doing the assignment and went straight to self-criticism on this point.

  3. For the base sausage, it is true that I considered the base nearly as "rigor-mortis". I don't know why I did it like this. I will correct that.

I will take a one week break as recommended and post my revision after that.

Thank again for taking the time to look at my work.

2:51 AM, Tuesday April 25th 2023

Yah no problem. The lessons can be daunting, especially when asked to do a revision, but I made almost the exact same mistakes, and I do believe they are worth correcting.

11:47 AM, Monday June 5th 2023

https://imgur.com/LqZk038

Hello Mucdirty,

Here is the revision.

Have a nice week :)

4:21 PM, Tuesday June 27th 2023

Looks good! Sorry for such a late response, I just fixed my computer. Good luck on the next lesson.

Next Steps:

Please move on to the 250 box challenge. Good luck!

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