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9:28 PM, Saturday September 23rd 2023

I'll be the TA handling your Lesson 2 critique.

You're making progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson and hopefully this critique will help you in your future attempts.

  • Starting off in the arrows section your lines are looking smoothly and confidently drawn. There are spots where your arrows bulge/narrow suddenly, this is an issue because it gives the impression that your arrows are stretching which hurts their solidity. Remember that as our arrows move closer to the viewer we want them to widen consistently. It's good to see that you're trying to implement line weight, just remember that you want to keep your applications subtle and you'll become consistent with mileage. here are some things to look out for when applying it. I'd like you to experiment more with foreshortening in your future attempts, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as demonstrated here.

  • Moving into the organic forms with contours exercise your forms are getting a bit too complex. We want to create our forms with both ends being the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating, or stretching along the form's length as discussed here. You're keeping your line work confident here which is great, if you feel uncomfortable working with contours still don't stress with more mileage it'll become more natural. Speaking of contours I'd like you to try and shift the degree of your contours more. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • In the texture exercises you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here. I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.

  • In the form intersections section you don't actually attempt to draw the intersections which you were instructed to do (you do it twice on the final page, once in the cone intersecting with a box, and your cylinder intersecting with another box). Instead you're mostly highlighting pre-existing edges rather than creating new ones via the intersecting forms. Your forms themselves are looking solid and while the task is difficult we want to see you attempt to draw these intersections.

  • While wrapping up your submission with the organic intersections exercise you show that you need a bit more time becoming comfortable with thinking of how these forms interact in 3D space and how they'd wrap around one another. You're mostly drawing forms over one another rather than wrapping them believably around the forms below.You're keeping your forms simple and easy to work with which is a good strategy to help produce good results. Your shadows are mostly hugging the form creating them rather than being cast on to another surface believably. Your shadows appear to be following a consistent light source, be sure to experiment with different angles and intensities when trying this exercise again in the future. I recommend pushing your light source to the top left or right corner of the page to start with, it's easier than working with a light directly above your form pile.

I won't be moving you on to the next lesson just yet, each lesson builds upon each other and I'd like to make sure you understand a few of these concepts a bit more before potentially creating more problems down the road.

With that being said I'd like you to please re-read and complete:

  • 1 page of the organic forms with contours exercise (half with ellipses, half with curves)

  • 2 pages of the form intersections exercise

  • 1 page of the organic intersections exercise

Once you've completed the pages mentioned above reply to this critique with a link to them, I'll go over them and address anything that needs to be worked on and once you've shown you're ready for the next lesson I'll move you on.

I look forward to seeing your work.

Next Steps:

  • 1 page of the organic forms with contours exercise

  • 2 pages of the form intersections exercise

  • 1 page of the organic intersections exercise

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
7:24 PM, Monday November 20th 2023

Hello hello

How are you?

Here are my homework. I think I did better this time arround.

Thank you for taking the time to review this.

https://imgur.com/a/gHsXRKa

7:47 PM, Monday November 20th 2023

I'm doing ok, thanks. I hope you are as well.

Your organic forms are on the right track but there are a few things to make note of:

  • You should draw through all of your ellipses (you neglect to do so on some of the small ellipses on the end of your organic forms).

  • In the organic intersections exercise try to wrap your forms around the form below rather than just resting the top form against the lower one.

  • Try to push your shadows further, currently they mostly hug the form creating them.

  • In the form intersections exercise you're mostly just highlighting the existing edge rather than creating intersections. Here's a demo of what to look out for.

I'll be asking you to draw one more page of form intersections please, if you have any questions before getting started feel free to ask them.

Next Steps:

1 more page of form intersections please.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:53 PM, Wednesday November 29th 2023

Hello hello,

how are you? Thank you for taking the time of reviewing (several times haha) my homework. I see now with the last demo that you gave me.

https://imgur.com/a/IzaWlAx

Have a nice day ! :)

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