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10:40 AM, Friday September 17th 2021

Hi! I'm gonna review your homework.

Before getting started, I want to keep one thing clear. ONLY POST YOUR FINAL WORK. This is because uploading more work than asked can be confusing, and let the reviewer thinking "what do I correct, the old exercises, the new one, do I have to correct everything?". In this case, I will correct your first attempt, as is expected from you to upload that part. With this in mind, we can start.

Lines exercises

  • Superimposed lines

In your superimposed lines exercises, I see two things. First, there are frying ends (this is normal at first if you are not used to use your whole shoulder for drawing. Second, I see that you finish your lines with a dot (because you don't lift your pen when you reach the end of the line). If you remember the lesson, the tip that was given to correct this was to lift the pen when you are close to the ending point of your line. Practice this when you are doing your warm ups.

  • Ghosted lines

Some of your lines create little arches or get a bit wobbly. Keep practicing with your shoulder. If you see that you keep doing arches with your straight lines, try to make an arch to the opposite side to correct this (remember this was said during the lessons!)

  • Ghosted planes

Same issues as earlier

Elipses exercise

  • Table of ellipses

An important issue that I see is that some ellipses have many lines drawn (you made more than 3 rounds). We need to be mindful with the execution of our lines, we cannot rush the process or make one million tries executed at the same time. Ghost your ellipses, take your time, and when you feel confident enough, go for it. Other thing that I see is that there are random ellipses that are used to fill the empty spaces. This isn't the approach of the exercises. We want to make one type of ellipses that are repeated, and are inbounds, trying to be the closest to each other. Don't go random and crazy, again, be mindful.

  • Ellipses in planes

More ore less the same as earlier about the execution. Aside from the ellipses, I'm seeing some impossible plains. Remember that planes in spaces are represented (at least in our exercises) with four points.

  • Funnels

I like how you tried to kep the funnels following the minor and major axis. I want to point you out that you could try to give more variety to your funnels, making the bounds more curved, changing the size of your ellipses, and so on.

Perspective exercises

  • Rough perspective

I see you messed up in some lines that direct to the vanishing point, even in the horizontal ones. I guess this is because you rushed the process and didn't stop to ghost or think about it. Next time take your time, and ghost the whole process.

  • Rotated boxes

I see that your biggest issue on rotated boxes is the boxes with the most dramatic turn in space. For example, look at this one: https://imgur.com/a/cuqLhte. Remember, a box affected by a 3 point perspective will have 3 vanishing points. In this case, you have to be wary on how these points rotate along the axis. Don't worry, you'll understand this part better with time and practice.

  • Organic perspective

The main issue I can see is that some lines aren't directed to their respective vanishing points. In this exercise we have to make some guesswork. Ghosting the process to that guessed vanishing point might help you to get more accurate lines.

And that's it.

Next Steps:

I need you to do this exercises:

  • A page of ghosted planes.

  • A page of ellipses in planes

  • A page of organic perspective

Remember to take your time and do this exercises calmly. Simply don't rush them and give your best effort!

Once done, come back with the revisions.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
7:33 PM, Tuesday September 21st 2021

First off, thank you for the quick and thorough critique. You were absolutely right about me rushing through the ghosting method and not truly understanding the vanishing points. My biggest mistake was not proceeding slowly enough.

I'm still having great trouble understanding the concepts of boxes in 3D space, as evidenced by the organic perspective revision, but I'm not going to give up.

http://imgur.com/a/dANJyz0

Please let me know if this is adequate,

6:58 PM, Thursday September 23rd 2021

Now your lines looks more confident and clean. However, I can see you added too much weight to your boxes in organic perspective. If you want to add line weight to these boxes, you need to be subtle. You'll need to know this for the 250 boxes challenge.

Next Steps:

Move to the 250 boxes challenge, which will help you understand better how a box moves and works in perspective

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