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9:32 AM, Monday October 26th 2020

superimposed lines

your superimposed lines look very frayed but you've superimposed them the correct number of time and given each line the space it needs to be correctly assessed.

i recommend you incorporate this into your warmup for the 250 box challenge, the fraying should improve over time, do though take enough time ghosting each line before you draw it, that might be were your issue lies since some lines look rushed.

ghosted lines

your lines have a slight wobble to them but they were drawn with confidence and i can clearly see that you've ghosted them,the wobble, like many things, will improve over time as you do the 250 box challenge and during the warm up of the next few lessons.

i recommend you to incorporate this into a warm up though if i give you extra work it won't automatically improve over the extra page that would be assigned, therefore i'm not assigning you an extra page.

ghosted planes

you've only done 1 page of ghosted planes, i also noticed that you didn't finish the rotated boxes, the rough perspective, the organic perspective. i suggest you first finish your homework before posting it to be critiqued!

Next Steps:

do the rest of the homework.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:01 AM, Friday October 30th 2020

Thank you for your great advice. i had some issues with Imgur and some of the images did not upload properly. I'll work on the recommendations you gave me.

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3:02 PM, Monday October 26th 2020

When submitting work in the future, please be sure that the images in the album correspond to the exercises you've checked off on the submission form. I assume in this case you may have had trouble uploading the images, or may have been a little careless - but if it were intentional, submitting partial work as a complete submission is something we take quite seriously, and would remove posting privileges for.

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3:03 PM, Monday October 26th 2020

Superimposed Lines: As the lines get longer, they start to get a slight curve to them. Remember to try and pivot from the shoulder for straighter lines and more accuracy as your muscles build. You clearly understood the instruction and goals of this section.

Ghosted Lines: These lines are straighter overall than the first exercise. Some of them skip a bit. Don't be afraid to commit fully to the line and put some pressure on the pen (not too much, but enough to make a confident line).

Ghosted Planes/Ellipses in Planes: Your lines are getting more confident through the exercises. The lines are straighter and more solid than earlier work. Work on the consistency of the ellipses. Overall, you've done a good job filling the planes. There is some overlap in places, but its clear you were working to hit each side. Remember, there should be two pages for these exercises.

Tables of Ellipses (2 pages) is missing

Ellipses in Funnels: Ellipses should be drawn over 2-3 times. In this exercise, the ellipses shouldn't have any angle to them, but should be bisected equally through the narrower axis, like a mirror.

Plotted Perspective: You clearly understand the concept. Well done.

Next Steps:

Complete all assignments, including the second page of the ghosted planes/ellipses.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
8:04 AM, Friday October 30th 2020

Thanks for the good advice. Imgur did not upload the entire assignment but I should have double checked. I agree that i need to work on giving the lines more weight and push in more. I'll work on your recommendations.

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