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7:57 PM, Monday October 24th 2022

Starting with your arrows, a quick reminder not to deviate from the instructions. The exercises has us drawing the edges in their entirety, even where there's twisting/overlapping - but you tend to cut them off where they're overlapped by the structure of the arrow itself. As you aren't in a position to know which aspects of the exercise can be altered without losing anything, and which cannot, it's important that you simply stick to what is instructed, striving to deviate as little as you can.

Continuing onto your leaves, you've done a good job of capturing their fluidity by leveraging the initial flow line to great effect. You're capturing not only how they sit statically in 3D space, but also how they move through the space they occupy. You're also building up edge detail well, doing so as though building onto a structure rather than attempting to replace it, and respecting the solidity of the earlier phases of construction. Well done.

Moving onto your branches however, it does appear that you did not adhere to the instructions here - most notably you didn't start with a central minor axis line, whose purpose is to help in aligning the various ellipses to one another. Furthermore, the manner in which the edge segments are laid out (first one going from the first ellipse, past the second, and extending fully halfway to the third, with the next segment then repeating the same pattern from the second ellipse) was not adhered to as closely as it could have either.

Moving onto your plant constructions, I do have a number of points to call out. Similarly to some of the previous exercises, there are areas where you simply didn't really adhere to the techniques and approaches laid out. It's not all over the place (if it were, I would have simply declined to accept this submission), but there are some notable areas - like the leaves on this plant where instead of adhering to the constructional approach introduced in the leaves exercise (constructional drawing being the core exercise we employ in lessons 3-7 as the primary focus of this course), you jumped ahead into drawing the complex shapes as you saw them.

I'm going to call out some additional points to keep in mind below, but I do want to make it clear that the way in which you are following this course right now is not holding to the responsibilities outlined here in Lesson 0, so I strongly recommend you review them.

As for the other points to keep in mind:

  • There are two things that we must give each of our drawings throughout this course in order to get the most out of them. Those two things are space and time. Right now it appears that you are thinking ahead to how many drawings you'd like to fit on a given page. It certainly is admirable, as you clearly want to get more practice in, but in artificially limiting how much space you give a given drawing, you're limiting your brain's capacity for spatial reasoning, while also making it harder to engage your whole arm while drawing. The best approach to use here is to ensure that the first drawing on a given page is given as much room as it requires. Only when that drawing is done should we assess whether there is enough room for another. If there is, we should certainly add it, and reassess once again. If there isn't, it's perfectly okay to have just one drawing on a given page as long as it is making full use of the space available to it.

  • As mentioned in Lesson 1, you are required to draw through all of your ellipses two full times before lifting your pen.

  • This one's an issue in your branches as well, but remember that as discussed in the Lesson 1 ellipses video, given a straight cylinder the degree of our ellipses will shift wider as we slide farther away from the viewer along the length of the form.

  • On the upper right corner of this page, you drew the stems of your plant there as lines. I understand this is likely because your drawing itself was small, resulting in smaller stems - but as a rule, don't represent forms with a single line, as they simply don't convey an encapsulation of volume. Even if it requires you to make the stems thicker than you intend, draw them using the branches technique - which, as noted previously, you will need to review to apply correctly.

  • I noted a specific construction where you skipped the leaf construction steps and jumped to a greater level of complexity - but in general you do not appear to be using the process introduced in that exercise (in that you're skipping the flow line entirely). The techniques introduced earlier in the lesson are intended to be used in the constructions, as shown in my various demonstrations.

Unfortunately you've fallen pretty far short of what was asked, so I will need to ask for a full redo for this lesson. As recommended before, I strongly urge you to review this video from Lesson 0 to refresh your memory on what is being asked of you in this course. It is critically important that you make every effort to follow the instructions as closely as you can, and that was not done here.

When you've completed the work, you will need to submit it as a fresh submission, which will cost you 2 additional credits.

8:23 PM, Monday November 7th 2022

https://imgur.com/gallery/9JzjPve

My second try at Lesson 3 Homework.

8:24 PM, Monday November 7th 2022

Oh sorry didn't read the last line when sending the new link. Ignore please, I will resubmit it properly.

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