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1:19 AM, Wednesday January 20th 2021

https://imgur.com/a/ZpTmg0s

While I was doing these I tried my best to keep all of your advice in mind...

For the first page I tried the dragonfruit to work on altering the 3d silhouette.

For the second page the strawberry was meant as a refresher for myself on the concepts I used with the original mushroom and the pear, and the two mushrooms were because I had noticed myself avoiding multiple overlapping forms previously.

The two flowers on the third page were to work on removing gaps from my leaf structures as well as working on my connecting points.

And finally the lotus was to make sure I drew every single petal of a complicated flower and to make sure I kept it all proper in my head as I did it.

Thank you again for all your help!

9:38 PM, Thursday January 21st 2021

Looking at your branches, I don't think you entirely took what I explained previously to heart. As shown here, you've got plenty of instances where you only extended your segments slightly instead of fully halfway to the next ellipse.

Your other constructions are looking solid, aside from the dragonfruit. The dragonfruit was actually a pretty fair attempt, but I think you got a little too overwhelmed by its complexity, and it impeded how you approached the individual steps, and also got in the way of your spatial reasoning. Here's how I'd approach it - as you can see, it's actually pretty close to how you did, but I was very focused at every step precisely on what I was doing. If I was focused on drawing the flow line for a leaf, that was my only concern.

Anyway, since you're still not doing the branches correctly, I want to see another page of those. Be sure to reread what I mentioned in my previous critique on that topic.

Next Steps:

One more page of branches.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
12:55 AM, Friday January 22nd 2021

https://imgur.com/a/SkhrHs0

I did my best to make sure to go halfway for each segment this time, though I'm sure I did not get it exactly... and on a couple of them I missed the ellipse by a bit or didn't curve enough and it wound up looking stiff... more ways to improve though~ at least I think I'm getting to the point where I can see my errors nearly as I make them.

Thank you again for everything you do here!

3:16 AM, Friday January 22nd 2021

Much better! I'll mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 4.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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