Hey Heidegaff! Your arrows look excellent, the line confidence on the really long ones makes them pop. The upper left section is kinda cluttered, but aside from that I don't see a whole lot of issues with them. Your leaves are also really good, you nailed the twisting and turning.
Your branches, however, could be a little better. While your line confidence is still great here, the ellipses all have the same degree. This makes the branch look flat and not like it's moving through 3D space. Varying the degrees helps give the viewer the illusion that it's moving towards or away from them. I also noticed that not a single forking branch was practiced here, and it really shows on the stems of the Cuatresia. I'd highly recommend tackling this exercise again.
As for the rest, your construction of flowers and mushrooms looks solid. Looks like you got a good grasp on how forms get wider or thinner. Since detail isn't the focus, I'd say it's alright to leave it out for now.
Next Steps:
You're so close to moving on, but I'm sorry to have to ask you to redo branches. Remember to vary your ellipse widths, and that the wider the ellipse, the more the section is faced towards the viewer. Maybe even practice drawing a plant with branching stems on top of that if you really want to. When that's all done, I won't bug you anymore... because Lesson 4's got plenty of bugs. Good luck!
I'm sorry if I reply to your critique just now, I don't think there's a way to get a notification from critiques on the site. I have finished lesson 4 already, but I did remake the branches page anyways. You're right, they look more tridimensional this way.
Oh dang, thanks for taking the time to reply. I just found out about your reply just now too, haha. It's been so long I forgot what I typed till I reread it.
That really is a whole lot better, good job.
Next Steps:
Go on to Lesson 4! Or wait... 5. Good luck!
A lot of my students use these. The last time I used them was when I was in high school, and at the time I felt that they dried out pretty quickly, though I may have simply been mishandling them. As with all pens, make sure you're capping them when they're not in use, and try not to apply too much pressure. You really only need to be touching the page, not mashing your pen into it.
In terms of line weight, the sizes are pretty weird. 08 corresponds to 0.5mm, which is what I recommend for the drawabox lessons, whereas 05 corresponds to 0.45mm, which is pretty close and can also be used.
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