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7:04 PM, Sunday July 25th 2021
Hi there! Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1, that's a huge step! I'm Gady and i'll be reviewing your work, so let's get to it.
Lines
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Overall, your lines are starting to gain confidence. I can tell that you strived for confidence over accuracy, so that's good, even if some lines came off kind of wobbly.
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It's good that you tried different curves on superimposed lines. Fraying was only on one of two sides, so that's good too.
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Other positive points: your lines usually don't arch, you plotted the points for all of them and you didn't repeat them when they were off.
Ellipses
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In this section is what I believe it's your biggest problem of this lesson. Your ellipses are most wobbling, they lack confidence and smoothness AND accuracy.
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On ellipse tables, you generally fall short and ellipses do not reach the bounds and they overlap with each other. I kind of get the sense they are made in a hurry, not taking the time to properly ghost them to plot them confidently and smooth. Sometimes you drew through them more than 2 or 3 times.
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On funnels, you forgot to draw the arches in most of them (or did you? I cant' tell from the scanning). Remember that the goal of the excercise is to draw ellipses that fit between the arches while being bisected by the minor axis.
Boxes
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I think this is a good first approach at perspective. Even though on rough perspective width lines should be (and in your work sometimes are not) parallel to horizon, and height lines should be (and in your work sometimes are not) perpendicular to horizon, I believe it's a decent outcome. This is a hard task, but it's good to keep in mind so you can get better at it.
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On rotated boxes, some boxes aren't rotating. Check this out: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg.
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Nothing to add to organic perspective, good job.
Final Thoughts
Overall, this is very decent work. As I already told you, I think that your biggest issue is with ellipses, so I will reccomend a revision before marking this as complete. However, there is something I wanted to bring to the table: from your commentaries and dates on the pages it's been almost a year since you made these excercises. I will just ask for some revisions here, but unless you are very confident with the concepts you have grasped over a year ago, please consider going over all of the excercises, as it will refresh the skills you already attained. But this is up to you.
Next Steps:
I will ask for the following revisions:
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one page of table of ellipses
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one page of funnel ellipses
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one page of ghosted planes with ellipses
Just submit these in the reply and I will mark this lesson as complete so you can go on to 250 Box Challenge.
12:05 AM, Saturday August 28th 2021
Thank you for the wonderfully well-written critique! I'll be sure to go over the previous exercises. Regardless, here are the revisions; https://imgur.com/a/P6ngh7h
2:35 PM, Thursday September 9th 2021
I'm glad you found the critique useful! Excellent job with the revisions, btw. I'll be marking this lesson as complete.
Next Steps:
Move on to 250 Box Challenge.
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