Hey JBJ20,
Straight out the gate, your lines are looking pretty sharp. There's some arcing and bending now and then, but by and large I can tell you're ghosting and following through with a confident stroke, so keep thatt up!
Moving on from that I'm seeing a lot of convergence issues in your work.
What I mean by "convergence issues" is that many of your parallel lines diverge away from your estimated vanishing points rather than converging on them. This is common and this exercise is largely about learning to recognize those instinctively. Make sure that you're thinking about whether your parallel edges are converging on a point. If they're bowing away from each other, you need to adjust.
You're also getting some pronounced distortion on some of these. Keep in mind that using the "Y" method of construction outlined in the "Organic Perspective" assignment that the interior angles between your "Y" lines should all be greater than 90 degrees. If you have anything less than 90 degrees, you'll suffer distortion like you see in some of your early boxes.
As you drew more boxes, these distortion and convergence issues lessoned significantly. One other thing I'd caution you against is having your estimated vanishing points too close together, as this can cause distortion as well. A common instinct is to estimate a vanishing point so that it fits onto the paper, but it is often the case that vanishing points lie off the paper. Make sure you're giving yourself adequate breathing room with your vanishing points.
The last thing I'll address is that you don't appear to have experimented with line weight in your boxes. This is a great exercise to practice line weight on as the forms are very simple. See Uncomfortable's advice on line outlined in the 250 Box Challenge lesson article. You might think about trying out adding more line weight to gain additional knowledge.
That's all for now. You really improved as you went. It's clear that you learned a lot from this lesson. Good job!
Fox
Foxconlon, thanks so much for the review! I appreciate the fact that I got it quickly. Can I ask for some clarification on my line weight? How would I experiment with it? I reread the 250 box challenge page but I still don't understand how I should experiment with line weight.
You're welcome! Happy to provide some feedback.
There several schools of thought when it comes to line weight, but some good general things to experiment with would be:
The outer contour of the box should be thickened as opposed to interior lines.
The outer contours adjacent to the shadowed side of the box should be thicker.
The interior lines that form the 3 arms of the "Y" in the Y method of box construction should be thinner than the outer contours, but thicker than the inner construction lines.
These are outlined in the "Line Weight" section here.
Hope this helps!
Thanks so much Fox! I wasn't able to understand that section much, so it helps a lot! Again, thanks.
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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