10:35 AM, Thursday March 30th 2023
Hi! Good job finishing the first lesson. I am Vlad, a student as you are, that is trying to help the community and so i decided to take a look at your approach of Lesson 1.
I would like to give you the best description I can so that it helps you understand where you did good and where you had mistaken. As already told in lesson 0 mistakes are great if you learn from them so don't try to make the perfect page for homework. So this is how I will proceed. I will talk individually about every page you have sent and i will try to explain to the best of my abilities what you have made correctly or failed to do. In case you got any question don't hesitate to contact me or reply to this review. Please note that all I am saying is purely my observation and I do not want to give any negatively advice towards your work.
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PAGE 1: Superimposed Lines
In page 1 i can see that most of your lines have got fraying in both sides, to me that gives a sign of rushing, you should try to pay more attention to the line and placing of your pen to get to most out of your lines. Otherwise i don't have anything else to say about page one.
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PAGE 2: Superimposed Lines
In page 2 the fraying is still mostly prezent on both sides so you should keep in mind the placement of your pen on the paper. It again seems a little bit rushed. Otherwise i dont have anything else to say about this page.
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PAGE 3: Ghosted Lines
Your ghosted lines look great i don't have much to say, As we look for the majority of them. A note is that they could of been a little straighter because some of them are curved and I can see one that is wiggling. Also you could have done a bit more just to fill the page better but overall okay lines.
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PAGE 4: Ghosted Planes
You have some wavy lines and have tried some weird angles that's why some of the elipses that you drawn are not correct. The reasoning in your wavy lines to me looks like a lack of Ghosting method. That should of helped you make the best lines for the plane. As explained in Lesson 0 move your arm from your shoulder so that you can make long confident lines. The wrist doesn't have a great angle for you to draw long lines or any big forms and use the Ghosting method this has the best effect on your lines. Also I have seen that the dots for the lines are a little to big, you should try and make them almost the same width as the line.
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PAGE 5: Ghosted Planes
Nothing more to say then what i had already specified above.
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PAGE 6: Ellipses Table
The ellipse table looks great i got nothing to say about it. A personal mention I would of tried to fill with small ellipses all of the remaining space between. Good job
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PAGE 7: Ellipses Table
Nothing more to say then what i had already specified above.
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PAGE 8: Funnels
As Lesson 0 specifies you should not do more pages if you have mistaken. It is ok to make mistakes if you can learn from them.
Nothing wrong about the fact that you have done multiple pages of the Funnels exercise but keep in mind we are not striving for perfection. The purpose of this exercise is to make you get comfortable for the following challenges like the THE 250 CYLINDERS CHALLENGE where the amount of ellipses you draw will give you enough millage that you would do perfect ellipses when you want. As mistakes in the funnels exercise I can see some of the ellipses that are not really following the middle axis and are a little bit rotated, also please do not worry this is a hard exercise and you did great. As Uncomfortable says :
Some of the exercises are made to be hard for beginners to show the level of dedication and patience a student has to offer.
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PAGE 9: Plotted Perspective
The boxes look pretty good as you respected the lesson and drawn inside the box but it would of really helped if you had done a shadow( like the one you did under) to all of the boxes so that you can see the way the box is facing better. Otherwise pretty good work.
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PAGE 10: Rough Perspective
From what I can see your rough perspective is in the middle , to me it looks a little bit rushed so you should of used the Ghosting method so that your lines could be straight and look crisp. It is hard for a begginer to do this exercise so you have done a pretty good job. Next time you wanna use this exercise for a warmup you should use the Ghosting method extended to see where the line should go. Then almost all of your lines will be converging to the same point.
exception may occur
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PAGE 11: Rough Perspective
Nothing more to say then what i had already specified above.
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Page 12: Rotated boxes
This is a very hard exercise especially for a beginner again as Uncomfortable mentioned, some of the exercises are made to be hard for beginners to show the level of dedication and patience a student has to offer. I can see you have tried your best, but I can see that the furthest boxes the ones diagonal to the center one do not have the angle they should. Also you could of added a little bit of line weight on the front faces of the box so that you could see better how the boxes are faced in 3D space. Overall pretty good but keep an eye on the lines and use your shoulder to draw even if the lines are small you will notice the difference immediately.
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PAGE 13: Organic Perspective
The first mistake i have noticed is that you had redone most of your lines, again the point is not to produce perfect work, you can learn more if you can see them then if you hide them by redoing the line also from what I can see the boxes are not really rotating they should be a little bit more rotated. I would recommend that you redo the 2 pages of Organic perspective so that you could understand better how to rotate boxes in 3D space. Also do not forget using The GHOSTING METHOD it will help a lot with the quality of the lines.
Again please note that all I am saying is purely my observation and I do not want to give any negatively advice towards your work.
Next Steps:
Please read and watch the content for Organic Perspective and redo the 2 pages of Organic Perspective for your homework. After you have finished you can send a link replying to this review and we will see if you can go to the next lesson.