Hello Thilo, thank you for responding with your revisions.

• For furry necks I recommend trying to include as much of the mass in the initial neck construction as you can, whilst still sticking to a simple tube. Anything that is lumpy, bumpy or complicated can be added later with additional forms.

• For the contour lines at the joints of legs. I think it is a good idea to still add them, even if they won’t be visible on the surface of the finished construction. The two sausage sections are not adjacent, and they are not just overlapping on a 2d piece of paper, they are occupying the same 3d space, and it is useful to define the contour of where they intersect just like we do for the form intersections exercise from lesson 2. Sometimes this contour line for the intersection will be very close to the outer contour of one of your sausage forms, but I still advise you to add it as it will help you to think in 3d.

Looking at your pages, this is a good improvement, although there are a few things to bring to your attention. Let's recap the main points I brought up in your initial critique and check off things that have gone well and identify areas that may still need to be addressed.

Core construction

On all of your new pages you've done a good job of starting with your major masses and connecting them together with a torso sausage (except for the puffin, there this doesn't apply) and a simple solid neck. Good work.

I did notice that with this lamb you've drawn the torso sausage as though we're looking at the animal from the side, and the other pieces like the legs and the head more from the front, as we see in your reference. This miss-match causes the body to look uncharacteristically long for this animal. Mistakes do happen, and you did the right thing to push forward and complete the construction, without attempting to alter the silhouettes of the forms you have already drawn, but I'd like to encourage you to make sure to be as thorough as you can when observing and analysing your subject. Make sure the forms you draw are directly informed by what is present in your reference, not what you remember seeing in your reference, as our memories can be unreliable.

Taking actions in 3D

I'm happy to see you drawing through your forms here, as this helps you to develop your understanding of 3D space, and actively reinforces the 3D illusion of your constructions. I can see that you've put a good deal of thought and care into adding complete forms when you want to build on your constructions, instead of adding single lines, good work.

Leg construction

You're sticking much more closely to sausage forms for your leg constructions (there's the occasional ellipse sneaking in in here and there, but not that many) and you're more consistent about applying a contour curve for the intersection where these sausage forms join together, nicely done.

On the hind legs of your lamb you appear to have fully encapsulated the upper sections within new, larger forms. This was something I called out in your initial critique, and explained that it actually works better to break these additions into pieces, as shown here.

Additional masses

Improvements I'm seeing:

• You've stopped trying to add too much complexity with a single mass, and are keeping them simpler where they are exposed to fresh air.

• You're more willing to use sharp corners where your additional masses wrap around the underling forms, which gives them a much more convincing 3D relationship with the other structures in your constructions.

• You've stopped adding lots of extra contour curves to the surface of your additional masses, and are spending your time an energy on designing their silhouette in a way that defines their three dimensionality instead.

Keep in mind for the future:

• Your use of additional masses is fairly sparse on most of these constructions. Keep in mind that there will often be a lot more going on in our reference than the simple sausage armatures. This ties into my earlier point about taking the time to observe your reference, and pushing yourself to include as much structural information as you can in each construction. This will help you to get more out of these constructional exercises in future. You can see examples of more liberal use of additional masses in the dog leg demo and puma demo I shared with you previously, and also in this partial kangaroo that I put together for another student.

Head construction

Your heads are looking more structural in these pages. You're less prone to altering your heads with partial shapes, and have constructed your boxy muzzle form with a solid connection to the cranial ball. As noted here sometimes your eye sockets get a little bit too rounded, which means you're missing that edge we need in order to wedge the base of the muzzle snugly against the eye sockets.

Conclusion

These are a significant improvement and I'll leave you to tackle the remaining points independently, in your own time. Feel free to move on to the 250 Cylinder Challenge, which is a prerequisite for lesson 6.