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10:44 AM, Saturday April 11th 2020

Starting with your superimposed lines, you're keeping a nice confident flow to these, which is great to see. There are a couple where you've got fraying on both ends of the line (which you've put crosses on), so make sure you're taking the time to line your pen up with the starting point.

Next, your ghosted lines and planes are looking straight and confident. There was quite a bit of overshooting on your first page of ghosted planes but you tightened this up significantly in the second.

Your tables of ellipses are looking pretty good, you've kept your ellipses nice and tight up against each other. I did notice a certain amount of stiffness to your ellipses however which may indicate you're allowing other pivots of your arm creep in so try to ghost these out and use only your shoulder. There's a good amount of variation in the shape and size of your ellipses as well, which is good to see.

The ellipses in planes are off to a good start, with the ellipses hitting the four sides of the plane quite well but again, it seems like your ellipses are still a bit stiff. There's also instances where you've prioritised accuracy over confidence, so make sure you prioritise confidence in all drawing for Drawabox.

Finally, you've done a good job of keeping your ellipses aligned to the minor axis of your funnels. Once again, your ellipses are a little stiff and you've drawn through them a few too many times - try to limit the number of times you draw through your ellipses to 2-3 times.

You've done a pretty good job keeping your horizontals parallel and verticals perpendicular to the horizon line on your rough perspective, as well as maintaining a good amount of line confidence. Your estimation of perspective here is not too far off the mark and where it does stray, it does so in expected ways, such as boxes further from the vanishing point being less accurate.

Your rotated boxes are off to a good start. You've kept the gaps between your boxes nice and consistent which has limited the amount of guesswork required. There's a good amount of rotation happening here, particularly on the front planes, however on your rear planes, there is not very much rotation present. This and organic perspective are both designed to be beyond a student's current capabilities in order to introduce them to new kinds of spatial problems they might not have otherwise considered.

Finally, you've created some really great looking compositions in your organic perspective. The variation in the size of your boxes and the overlapping you've done is creating a great sense of scale in your compositions and exploring the depth of the 3D scene quite effectively. There are a few issues with divergence in your boxes however this is something you can work on in the 250 box challenge.

Next Steps:

I would like to see one more page of funnels with multiple on one page if possible, focusing on getting a confident flow to your ellipses and fully engaging your shoulder.

When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
11:48 AM, Monday April 13th 2020

Thank you so much for that detailed feedback! I will definitely do another page of funnels :)

6:38 PM, Tuesday April 14th 2020

Here are two more pages of funnels, still not perfect. Should I do more?

https://imgur.com/a/9TxoDTS

5:02 AM, Wednesday April 15th 2020

We're not looking for perfection, only a trend of improvement. These are looking much better in terms of confidence and alignment - there's still some minor skewing but you'll be able to iron those issues out as you continue and incorporate these into your warm-ups.

Next Steps:

Feel free to move onto the 250 box challenge.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
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