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6:47 PM, Monday March 15th 2021

Make sure that in the future you don't simply reply to your own comment, as this does not notify anyone else.

Starting with your branches, these are looking much better. Be sure to continue pushing the confidence of each stroke (yours appear to get a little hesitant, so use of the ghosting method and drawing from your shoulder will be important here).

For your leaves and plants, there's two main concerns:

  • When you tackle more complex leaf constructions, you have a tendency to jump into far more complexity, way too soon, without first laying down the supporting structure as explained here. You handled this correctly in the upper-left leaf on your page of the leaves exercise, although the bottom left would definitely have been better off constructed as separate leaf shapes for each arm. You also jumped into far more complexity than you should have with the petals of this flower. Instead, either constructing each half of the petal as a separate leaf shape or drawing a single big leaf shape and making a relatively simple cut at the end in a subsequent phase of construction would have been better. Construction is all about breaking complex problems into smaller ones, rather than trying to handle everything all at once.

  • Your areas of filled black should be reserved for cast shadow shapes only. It seems that you've filled a lot of the veins of your leaves with solid black. Given that we're drawing with fineliners and basically have the choice between white and black with no midtones, we don't really have any way to worry about capturing any kind of local colour information (like where things are darker, and other things are lighter). For this reason, we pretty much have to ignore all colour information and focus instead on what the viewer could ostensibly feel with their hands. As such, we use solid black only to capture cast shadows of forms - whether larger constructed ones, or smaller textural ones. You'll actually see an example of how I handle the veins on leaves in the leaf exercise instructions. I focus on the shadows being cast on either side, drawing around the veins without every drawing them directly.

All in all you're moving in the right direction. There is plenty of room for growth, but I will go ahead and mark this lesson as complete.

Next Steps:

Move onto lesson 4.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
7:16 PM, Monday March 15th 2021

just to make sure, the leaves of the leaf exercise you are talking about are the ones on my horizontal page or the vertical one?

8:07 PM, Monday March 15th 2021

Sorry, I meant the horizontal one.

8:11 PM, Monday March 15th 2021

alright

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