Hi Timothyfet,

I looked through your assignment before I realized Lilego had written a critique for you, they caught nearly everything I had to say, including the most important items like the Rough Perspective and Rotated Boxes exercises.

A couple other things I wanted to note:

• Remember that for the ellipses in tables assignment, we want to force ourselves to build ellipses in the established space we have made for ourselves beforehand with the tables. There's only a few locations where you didn't do this, see the 7th rectangular frame down in the right column, page 1, and the lowest frame in the right column on page 2 for examples of what I mean. We want to fit the ellipses into the rectangles/curves we've already established rather than "freestyle" the ellipses in open space before snugging up the new ellipses. This will be important in the future when we get to stuff like cylinders. We want to be able to nail the minor AND major axes when we build our ellipses. Your ellipses are very impressive otherwise, so I doubt you'd have any issues with this (and no need to redo the exercise), I just want to stress the point of the exercise for future warm-ups, etc.

• I also noticed you're extending some of your lines when it comes to stuff like rotated boxes. Remember to ghost every line, establish your starting AND end points beforehand, and try to nail those line lengths so they don't continue off into space. This will keep your strokes very clean when we move on to more complicated drawings. Your rotated boxes are spectacular and it looks like you have a really good grasp of 3-D space, but we don't want to rely on visible vanishing points or reference lines to create every box. I know, when you're doing pencil or digital, we can always erase or remove these reference lines, but a major point of this program as a whole is to establish confidence in our linework so we don't always need to rely on those reference lines. This will be very important for your 250 boxes! I'd hate to see someone recommend you do the challenge over because you were drawing out your reference lines. We want to eyeball it first and check our work after so we get comfortable with NO reference lines.

Also, just wanted to note that I really dig your style. Your ballpoint technique looks super rad, and while the rotated boxes wasn't technically correct in a perspective sense, it's one of the more impressive drawings I've seen in Lesson 1 submissions. I also really enjoyed the creative ways you tried to push your comfort zone on a lot of these exercises (even if Uncomfortable doesn't typically approve of that). I really hope you stick with this program and that I'll get to see some of your future work. Keep at it!

Cheers :)

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