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7:05 PM, Friday November 4th 2022
Hi, I will be handling your critique.
Lines: In the Superimposed Lines, I can see that sometimes there are some fraying at the starting point. Your pen should be placed carefully at the beggining of each line. You should not rush. Also, there is some wobble, which is normal and caused by hesitation, but you should be aware. Remember the mantra of the lesson: confidence is more important than accuracy. If you don´t hit the dot but your line is smooth and confident, you´ve made the right job.
The gosted lines and ghosted planes has the same 'accuracy over flow' problem, and this makes your lines don´t be straight. To avoid this, try doing the lines more quickly. You still need to ghost and plan them carefully, but when you´re ready, don´t slow the pen down.
Also, they´re anchoring slightly when they reach the end dot, which indicates that you´re too corcened about them hitting it. Overshooting is not a problem here, especially if it helps you increase the line smoothness. A quote from the lines section that might help: "Try lifting your pen off the page the second you hit that end point. Lifting it up is a much more reliable action you can perform far more responsively, and it avoids the hesitation you get from slowing down."
Ellipses: in the tables of ellipses, especially in the first sheet, some of them are a little wobbly. There is an improvement, but again, just something to be aware. The main issue is that some ellipses feel a bit rushed, they are not fitting within the boundaries correctly, and their deegree and shape varies inside the same section. The ellipses of a section should have the same angle and degree (I´m not talking aboutthe ellipses fitting in the empty spaces).
Ellipses in planes are nice, you´re not worried about making the ellipses follow the shape of the planes, and you did a great job trying to make them touch the four sides.
In Funnels, the main issue is the angle of the ellipses. The straight line should represent the minor axis of the ellipses, which means that it should cut them in two equal parts. I noticed althought that the measurement is not correct, and that longer line is not exactly in the middle of the funnel.
Boxes: Hey, you´ve nailed at your boxes! Of course there are problems, but they are mostly what I said regarding the lines. Rough perspective is fine, and Rotated Boxes are excellent, you´ve really tried to rotate them. I just missed some linewieght in the Organic Boxes, which should be used only on overlaping lines.
That´s it. You´ve completed the first step and should be proud for doing it! I´m requesting revisions so you can apply what I said about the lines. Make sure to review the lines page too, to refresh your memory.
Sorry for any broken english, it´s not my first language.
Next Steps:
1 page of Superimposed Lines
1 page of Ghosted Planes
9:54 PM, Wednesday November 23rd 2022
Hey thank you for giving out a critique as fast as you did and I'm sorry it took me as long as it did to reply back to you. A bunch of life stuff piled up so I didn't get much of a chance to work on the points you brought up. But I got it done so I would appreciate if you looked at my revisions the same you did with my original post. Thank you in advance.
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