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1:53 PM, Tuesday July 13th 2021

Hi! I'll be critiquing your work, I feel that the previous critique was not thorough enough.

Starting off with the arrows, your first strokes are very smooth, but the line weight is hesitant and wobbly. Be more confident with your strokes. A confident wrong stroke is always better than an accurate wobbly stroke. Don't worry too much, just ghost, and put down your stroke and let it taper as mentioned in this image: https://imgur.com/OHvr7Mb Also when you put down hatched lines, always make sure it touches both ends of the form, don't leave it hanging in the middle. There are spots where your arrows bulge/narrow suddenly, this is an issue because it gives the impression that your arrows are stretching which hurts their solidity. Keep the foreshortening steady throughout the form, not sudden. Experiment more with foreshortening in your future attempts, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as demonstrated here.

Moving on to organic forms, I see that your lines have sudden sharpness and there are bulges in your form suddenly. You want the form to be of consistent width, always remember that. Keep the lines smoother next time and keep in mind that you have to draw with your shoulder. When your line strokes stop suddenly, it could be possible that that is because your range is limited due to using your elbow or wrist. Note how the degree of the ellipses change here: https://imgur.com/vg0vy0v The round ellipse you add is supposed to be on the side facing the viewer, and the side facing the viewer is that which has the wider degree. Believe in the lies you want to convince your audience with. Also hook it slightly less.

Moving on to the texture exercises, while the organic forms look very pretty, these are not cast shadows. It is a mistake everyone makes, but don't outline your forms. You want to focus on shapes not lines: https://i.imgur.com/M9JJfr4.png You did however understand in the texture analysis to use cast shadows (except the crumpled paper where you used lines and not shapes), so apply it on dissections. I'm sure you understand but let me just throw the link down here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/notransition In the leaves texture there wasn't a transition from heavy to moderate density, make sure to really zoom into your references and get all the tiny details to apply to the left.

Next we have the form intersections where you haven't localized the line weight, make sure to reference the image I linked in the arrows section of this critique. Your forms are all solid and consistent, good work there. Your intersections are off in a lot of places, but thats okay since this is your first introduction to this very tough concept. Make sure to try them out later and also keep in mind the contour lines of both the forms that intersect when you create these lines.

The final exercise, organic intersections! As I mentioned before, keep your forms consistent. Your forms don't have a consistent source of light, since this also troubled me, I would say to remind yourself that the shadows will fall exactly opposite to the source of light is helpful. Keep it at the top left or top right to avoid confusion.The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it. Mainly just visualize them as water balloons and believe in their solidity. Also a lot of your forms float in space instead of piling on top of each other. Keeping some forms considerably smaller doesn't help so lengthen those. Here's an image I think will help: https://i.imgur.com/KJQhpn8.png Think of these forms as a whole solid.

Overall I can see that you're grasping the concepts. Just go over Lesson 1 and 2, critique a few people's homework and please fill in your shadows completely. Add these exercises to your warm up and good luck on lesson 3!

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3:08 PM, Tuesday July 13th 2021

Thanks a ton for the critique! Really appreciate it!

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