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2:46 AM, Tuesday March 10th 2020

Hey Delay, glad you could finish up lesson 1, big props there! With regards to your question: all things ellipses are just a matter of time and practice. For the funnels exercise I know one method that yields decent success is to align your forearm to your desired minor axis direction.

So now let's move on to your lesson 1 critique! Starting with your super imposed lines, you have a lot of wavy action going on indicating you are trying to consciously guide your pen tip instead of trusting your shoulder and executing a confident mark so just keep practicing using your shoulder as at this point we emphasize flow over accuracy. Your ghosted lines show improvement in regards of using your shoulder and at this point it's just a matter of more mileage to build up your confidence and comfort using your shoulder to execute your marks.

Moving on to your ellipses, let's just say it: ellipses are hard to draw, even for experienced artists. It really does take a ton of practice in your daily warmups (not a ton of practice in a day, just lots of consistently chipping away at those skills to develop them). I see you are trying to draw through your ellipses as instructed but they are a little wild. That's ok at this point and just needs more practice like everything. With your ellipses in planes you are mindful in trying to make contact with the planes at the correct points, and with your tables of ellipses exercise you are doing a good job keeping your ellipses tightly packed to leave no room for ambiguity. We already disucssed a little bit about the funnels exercise, but to state things another way, try to make your ellipses bisected by the funnel axis and then it will naturally have the correct alignment between the funnel axis and the minor axis.

Now let's look at your rough perspective boxes. The first thin I notice is your line quality is very shaky. This is very common for students because this is the first time you're asked to draw something besides abstract exercises. First thing's first: trust the method. That is,plan your lines, ghost your lines, execute confidently with the shoulder. Your confidence does increase throughout the exercise so that's great to see. Your horizontal lines are pretty parallel to the horizon and verticals perpendicular so that yields correctly oriented boxes. Your convergine line accuracy is pretty darn good as indicated by your correctly applied check lines.

Moving on to your rotated boxes exercise there is a clear jump in your confidence and it's great to see! This is a great submission of this exercise - your boxes are rotated, they are packed tightly together, and your lines are pretty good with careful hatching. You also drew large which is great because it gives your brain more room to work, so overall great job here. Our goal isn't for a "good" or "neat" attempt at this exercise, just for students to do it so they can see these types of puzzles and ways to work through them, but you did a very good job here.

Finally, let's look at your organic perspective. This exercise shoes the culmination of the work you've been doing throughout this lesson and its payoff. Your lines are crisp and your perspective is pretty good for the most part. Your compositions are ok, but there could be some things done to add to the illusion of 3d space such as overlapping your forms more and doing more size scaling to show them more in the foreground and receding into the background. Overall though this is a good job on it and those things are more nitpicks and less to do with the overall exercise.

So with this, I will be marking your lesson 1 as complete.

Next Steps:

Your next stop is the 250 box challenge. Be mindful of the 50/50 rule for avoiding burnout, make sure to take advantage of all the material uncomfortable has provided for the challenge, and keep up the good work.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
1:38 PM, Wednesday March 11th 2020

Hello Svendogee,

thank you very much for your review. Every time I learned a new skill in the past I did this without any feedback, but it is such an motivational boost, I'm glad having found this site. I also want to mention that I didn't notice the improvement in my line work on my own, it's very cool to see that now.

I'm happy to tackle the challenge from now on. Thanks again for the nice critique, it's very helpful.

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