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7:06 AM, Friday December 11th 2020

Hi there I'll be handling your lesson 2 critique.

You're making good progress towards understanding the concepts introduced in this lesson. I'll be listing some things below that will hopefully help you in your future attempts of these exercises.

  • Your arrows are off to a good start, just 2 quick notes for you here. The first is that a lot of your lines through this lesson appear quite feint which is probably a sign that you need to adjust your scanner settings, if it's set to drawing settings it tends to make the page as white as possible which blows out people's lines funnily enough. The second being that I'd like you to experiment with foreshortening in the space between curves of the arrows a bit more, by utilizing it in this space along with the arrow itself you can really sell the illusion that your arrows are moving through 3D space, for more info on this idea read here.

  • You're close to keeping your organic forms with contours nice and simple but not quite there just yet. Our goal when creating simple forms is to keep both ends the same size and to avoid any pinching, bloating or stretching along the form's length, more info can be found here. You could push your contours a bit further to shift their degrees as well. The degree of a contour line basically represents the orientation of that cross-section in space, relative to the viewer, and as we slide along the sausage form, the cross section is either going to open up (allowing us to see more of it) or turn away from the viewer (allowing us to see less), as shown here.

  • In the texture exercises you're on the right track but still focusing on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself. This makes it difficult to create gradients with implied information which we could then use to create focal points in more complex pieces, by doing so we can prevent our viewers from being visually overwhelmed with too much detail. For more on the importance of focusing on cast shadows read here, I'd also like to quickly direct you to this image which shows that when we're working with thin line like textures if we outline and fill the shadow we will create a much more dynamic texture than simply drawing lines.

  • If you feel like you don't fully grasp form intersections just yet don't worry, right now this exercise is just meant to get students to start thinking about how their forms relate to one another in 3D space, and how to define those relationships on the page, we'll be going over them more in the upcoming lessons. Overall your forms are looking solid and like they all belong together in a consistent space, good work.

  • Lastly your organic intersections are well done, your sense of 3D space is clearly developing as your forms are mostly wrapping around one another in a way that makes sense. I would suggest experimenting with moving your ligh source around more so you can build up an understanding of how shadows would behave and cast from different angles.

Overall this was a really well done submission, you have a few mistakes but they're largely just cases of you need more mileage with these concepts and not a sign that you're misunderstanding them. I'll be marking your submission as complete and moving you on to the next lesson.

Keep doing previous exercises as warm ups and good luck in lesson 3!

Next Steps:

Do previous exercises as warm ups.

Move on to lesson 3.

This critique marks this lesson as complete.
9:41 AM, Saturday December 12th 2020

Thank you for the critique. Will try to apply corrections where pointed out!

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